Love this fic, and how you write James/Lily! Have been trying to write a Marauder One-Shot and this is exactly how I want to capture their relationship.
Wow, the ending is so beautiful. And I would pay to see the marauder's faces when James and Lily disappeared. Good one.
All nicely wrapped up and without James ending up in hospital - hee hee.
Great story, Gina. I loved all the little moments in it that showed why they really were meant for each other, but also the way you pput difficulties in their way. Must have been so hard thinking about marriage in those times, but then, if you're living with the constant threat of death or injury (especially if you're james in your stories -snigger-) then you have to grab your happiness when you can.
Hmmm, I would be interested in reading your perspective of Peter at this time, and whether he's already turning to the other side, or at least thinking about it.
Well done ~Carole~
Did I not review after chapter eight? Strange. I really loved the charmed ring--nice touch, and perfectly Sirius. This was a fitting end. I enjoyed the bit with the portkey and the fact that the other three didn't get to see the proposal. Get your own lives, people! Haha! Well done, as always, Gina. I've enjoyed reading! ~Lori
Good finish. Pity we know what happens in the books.
Yayayayayayyayayayayayyayayayaya - they got together!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Gina this is a lovely chapter and to me it seems as if the story is complete, but I'm not going to turn down the opportunity of another chapter :D :D :D.
(just don;t put James in hospital again - ha ha)
Sirius, Sirius, you romantic fooooool! I loved the Charmed ring - very sneaky of him, and the smutty joke ... ha ha ha ... made me laugh and then cough rather a lot - heh heh.
,br> Okies, dreadful review, but really like the chapter and story. Well done ~Carole~
A little bit more please. Get the ring out of his pocket and on her finger.
Please write another chapter!!! This is too cute!!
Oh, this was worth the wait. I was so hoping that Lily would have a good explanation, and you made it perfect! Thank you for such a wonderful chapter and such a beautiful story!!!
And they have a daughter called Harriet ...
Tch! Way to go at ruining the story for me!
Great chapter, Gina, I'm glad that James is first of all not injured, second not being attacked and third - has got another date with Lily and has seen her Patronus. I LOVED his line about being in trouble - hahahahahahahahaha
Fab Stuff ~Carole~
I absolutely looovveee this story! Its my favorite james/lily fic and its so cute! I get so excited every time its updated!!:) i think it would be cool if you wrote this same story in lily's point of view!! Thanks for writing! Keep it up!!
Good chapter, but I do not think the possum is a native of England.
"You do seem to spend an unusual amount of time in these lovely places," Sirius said, and James could not miss the dry sarcasm in his friend's voice. "You should do something about that.
Yes, and whose fault is that, Gina? Hmm, hmm, hmmm?
She's made that clear three times now. Never mind."
Ah, thrice defied - you're making a habit of that Lily!
"She did good out there, James.
Okay, I am going to pick at this but only because I think Hereward is absolutely brilliant and I really like the way you've written him. But this phrase is rather American and although we might say it now, for Hereward it's out of era (and for James, actually). He'd be more likely to say 'She did extremely well' (ends nit pick now)
I love Remus. That is all
Author's Response: Thank youuuuu, Carole! This was one of those chapters that I thought had so much foreshadowing it was sad - and that comment above wasn't just referring to me, but to his fate by JKR's words as well. :( Didn't make the connection to the number three, lol. And as for that Americanism - you know, that's not even something I would have *thought* to ask about. And I've been asking a number of questions on AIM lately - I just wouldn't have pegged that phrase as one that needed questioning. So I've changed it as per your suggestion. :) Thanks for pointing it out. And thank you for reading!! ~Gina :)
Awwwww - lovely kiss and beautifully written. It really does get hard to write them after a while, but you made this very entrancing and breathtaking to read.
Aaaand the doe!!! YAYYYYYY
Sorry, this isn't a great review, but those were my utter favourite bits in a very exciting chapter.
If I have any crit, it's minor, but maybe watch the way you write Albus. For the vast majority of the time, I think you write him well, but there were a few occasions where he came across as rather slangy (hope you don't mind me saying this.)
We've got people out listening, gathering information,
Dumbledore tends not to use contractions, and 'got' is one of those words that's quite informal, and he does tend to be a more lyrical speaker. But really that's a very measley crit from me and I'm only mentioning it because otherwise this would all be gush and squee :) (plus I'm obsessed with character voices at the moment - blame my reading of TCV) By the way, if you'd said 'gotten' I would have been forced to leave a review laced with Bobutuber pus ...
Well done - great story and chapter. ~Carole~
Author's Response: I'll fix his contractions, lol. Funny you say that because Kara thought my Sirius story didn't have enough so I've been hyper-aware of them, lol. I can see it, though. But I'm glad you liked the kiss. It's all in the artwork, really. And when it first occurred to me that James was going to turn around after that and get cursed, I really wondered whether I could get away with that, lol. Poor guy. ;) Anyway - thanks so much for reading, I really appreciate the review! ~Gina :)
Oh, how I love them all, especially when you are writing them. You can have James if I can have Remus. :) On the edge of my seat here....
Author's Response: Er, I think Lea has claimed Remus several times over? You can duel it out, lol. Thanks so much for reading, Lori. Not sure why you are on the edge of your seat as you know things always work out for J/L...at least until October, 1981. :( Anyway - it's almost done - hope you enjoy the rest! Thanks again! ~Gina :)
I tend not to read much Marauder Era stuff, but this one caught my eye, and I'm really glad it did! I think this is a really great story, and the characterizations are wonderful. Even though I know that James and Lily end up together, I think you've done a masterful job of leaving we the readers in suspense about what will happen to them! I'm new to your works, but after reading this I plan to check out your other stuff!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you decided to give this a chance and really appreciate your comments. I've actually written quite a bit of ME - particularly James and Lily - so I do hope you find something that interests you on my author's page if you stop by. I'm glad you liked the suspense, I've been called on it with this pair, lol. Thanks so much for reading and for leaving such a lovely review!! ~Gina :)
it was very well written. you know how to put up a battle. update soon. i'm waiting here :)
verry well done. Thanks for you're lovely story.
OHHH! You do mean Adriam - ignore my last review quibble - eeep.
Exciting stuff, Gina. The battle was superbly plotted and very interesting to read. I loved how Lily managed to keep her head, cast the wards and had a plan for helping Moody. You gave James just the amount of concern for her, but not so much that he forgets his mission to protect only her. I liked the other characters in this, too. Gideon and Dorcas became real people rather than just names from canon.
Well done. ~Carole~
Yay, they're on a da ... er ... at dinner. Poor James. it must be very hard for him. I like the story here, and Orsino is a great character. I do think Squibs have an interesting dilemma to face, and this idea of being in both worlds is great.
Enjoying so far :) ~Carole~
Author's Response: A belated thank you for reading and leaving a review! Not quite a date, as you can see...maybe later. ;) Thank youuuu!~Gina :)