I think you have a good thought process on this story. It will go far and I can't wait to read what happens next!

The only thing that I really have to say for advice is that this seemed simply worded and choppy. Don't get me wrong, some parts were written really well and don't need to be fixed at all, but other parts need some stronger vocabulary, you know what I mean?

Overall, props to you, Julie, and Sophie! I really like reading about the next generation's story and I wish that Jo would write more about them!!!!!!! :D

~crbluvsravenclaw

Author's Response: Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!! Julie and Sophie have been amazing :) I feel the same way... Wish Jo would write more about them. Thanks! ~Nidhi