Reviews For Mourning
Reviewer: gottalovemyneville
Date: 12/04/12 7:44
Chapter: Mourning

this is wonderful writing :)

Author's Response: Thank you! ~ Megan

Reviewer: baby54boomer
Date: 09/16/12 22:56
Chapter: Mourning

Too short!!!! No resolve!!!! You posed the question and did not answer it!!! ARRGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHH

Author's Response: I'm glad there was something about this that made you want more. When I first wrote it, it really was a character study in Molly's reaction to the war, but I've received a bunch of feedback that's made me start thinking about another scene or two. I don't guarantee anything, but something may come of the musings. Thank you for reading! ~ Megan

Reviewer: Theloonyhermione
Date: 09/16/12 18:56
Chapter: Mourning

Wow, this was really good. I thought you captured Molly perfectly, and the part about Andromeda was really sad. I'm sure that was the emotion you were trying to get across, though, so great job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece. ~ Megan

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 09/16/12 13:37
Chapter: Mourning

This starts as many other post battle stories do ..... and then just leaves us hanging. Will Molly move on? What is really going through Andromeda's mind? We need more.

Author's Response: I'm glad the piece is something you want to see more of. I honestly hadn't seen it moving past Molly's musings, but since receiving some feedback like yours, I've started to mull over the possibility of another chapter or two. We'll see if anything comes of the musings. Thank you for reading! ~ Megan

Reviewer: Miss B
Date: 09/16/12 7:49
Chapter: Mourning

I'm going to practice my editing skills beyond copy-editing to content-editing and be completely honest in this review. Frankly, the way this is written, it seems more like a meaty head-canon than story. That said, it could have potential as a great story of it were expanded. As it is, it is just an explanation of things, there is no plot in it. This could serve as the introduction chapter of a true story if you wanted to write more on it. You could expand more on the relationship between Molly and Andromeda. Give them some dialogue, an actual moving scene. Conflict, plot, and action, you know? I really think more could be said about this. It's nice so far, but I do think you should add a second chapter.

Author's Response: I appreciate the comments. I know exactly what you mean about the story lacking a true plot; that was intentional. I saw it more as a character study of Molly post-war than something driven by an outside conflict. I've had a few comments about the length and have considered expanding it. If I do, I'll keep in mind what you've said about expanding on the relationship between these two women. Thank you for reading! ~ Megan

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