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Name: Misshogwarts1125 (Signed) · Date: 10/14/13 15:09 · For: The Edges of Evening
this is where you are leaving it? seriously? Update soon so I can know what happens. I'm also pretty upset that you killed off Ron.


Name: Misshogwarts1125 (Signed) · Date: 10/14/13 15:08 · For: The Edges of Evening
this is where you are leaving it? seriously? Update soon so I can know what happens. I'm also pretty upset that you killed off Ron.


Name: trigg (Signed) · Date: 09/22/13 11:23 · For: The Edges of Evening
Very good story. Hope you'll update it soon.


Name: SilverDoe_IsoBell (Signed) · Date: 09/04/13 18:59 · For: Prologue
As other reviewers have said, this is an amazing story which NEEDS TO BE CONCLUDED! Seriously ;)


Name: Maple_and_PheonixFeather (Signed) · Date: 06/02/13 14:05 · For: The Edges of Evening
JAMIE YOU NEED TO FINISH THIS RIGHT NOW I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!

Maple


Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 10/27/12 5:28 · For: The Edges of Evening
I am not sure what "END PART ONE" means. Will there be six more long chapters before the end of part two?


Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 10/26/12 20:55 · For: The Edges of Evening
Fantastically brilliant!!!


Name: Ribe featherquill (Signed) · Date: 10/24/12 13:25 · For: Fatalities and Interrogations
What a story! I like this, but when whill justice be done. How sad that Ron is dead. Thanks for the story.


Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 10/20/12 5:29 · For: Fatalities and Interrogations
I cannot believe you killed off Ron!


Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 10/19/12 20:07 · For: Fatalities and Interrogations
Fantastic!!!


Name: macheel (Signed) · Date: 10/09/12 17:28 · For: The Case Against Harry James Potter
This story is getting good!


Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 10/09/12 17:15 · For: The Case Against Harry James Potter
Positively brilliant!!!


Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 10/09/12 10:11 · For: The Case Against Harry James Potter
I nust admit I saw the D.A. thing coming, but it must be some one very clever to set it up.


Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 09/24/12 19:00 · For: Turning the Tables
The plot thickens.


Name: Bladeash631 (Signed) · Date: 09/24/12 14:26 · For: Turning the Tables
wow this is amazing nice cliffhanger can't wait to read more


Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 09/24/12 14:14 · For: Turning the Tables
Interesting. Very interesting!


Name: majestic_ginny (Signed) · Date: 09/09/12 6:25 · For: Prologue
Jamie, this was just... wow. It definitely has to be one of the best mystery stories I've read. Your writing style and vocabulary kind of made me feel that I was inside some murder mystery show like Castle, White Collar or CSI. It was electrifying, captivating and, at some times, rather bone-chilling.

Firstly, I must tell you that I absolutely loved Harry. He was so professional and so much more mature than the Harry we've read about in the books, and yet he still retains the sense of loyalty he feels towards his friends (It’s understandable that this is the Harry Potter we know and love, especially here: nor could he quell the odd feeling in the pit of his stomach that he was somehow returning home.) I can understand how guilty he feels by suspecting Neville. Neville has been his good friend since childhood, and suddenly having to suspect him for a murder and then arresting him must have been a huge dilemma for him. Your words have managed to transfer that pressure onto me, and I found myself pursing my lips and hoping that something would come up so Harry doesn't have to do this.

For the barest of moments, Harry closed his eyes, before turning the handle and entering the office. This line was so poignant, and having it as a separate paragraph managed to increase its significance tenfold. I’ve seen you do this a couple of other times (for example, the last line of the prologue, which was completely a bolt from the blue), and they have always rendered the same effect. I ended up sighing and shaking my head when I read the line. I could tell that Harry absolutely hated doing this, but he had no other choice. Duty was duty, and he had simply had to do it. I liked how he dressed up so professionally for this, just so that Neville understood that it was obligatory, no matter how much he hated it. I felt so sorry for both of them.

One thing I found interesting was the way you included all the FACTS and SUSPECT things. I felt like listing them all so that I could form my own folder for the case, haha. This originality is really commendable. I do wonder, though, if it would be better in italics. Having it in bold sort of breaks the flow slightly and looks like a division. I think having it in italics might make it look a bit better.

I love how you so professionally and accurately wrote the toxicology report and the list of licences. As I said above, this makes the story look exactly like a real murder mystery, and I think you’ve researched really, really well... and it makes me think whether you actually deal with these stuff in your real life, hehe ;-).

So far, the case looks like it would go against Neville. The plot twists were baffling, and every piece of evidence that came against Neville was bone chilling. My eyes widened at this line: “but if memory serves, Longbottom keeps a bowl of these on his desk." I know Neville didn’t do this (knowing your reputation, I’m sure you wouldn’t make Neville a murderer, lol) but still, this was a startling piece of evidence. All these facts combined with Neville’s nervousness and stuttering undeniably indicate that Neville is the murderer. You’ve done a good job at making it look like that!

The proof against Neville is substantial. I really want to know what it was that Neville and was talking about with Marcus. While I know that it is shocking for any father to hear that his daughter is sexually involved with a boy, I really, really doubt that he would go to the extent of killing him, and especially so if the dad happens to be Neville. Frankly, I don’t think Neville would do that. That leads me to wonder who would be able to sneak into Neville’s office, let alone his private stash in the room of requirement, to get the dragonbane and slip it into the sweets. This mystery has got me perplexed.

I absolutely can’t wait for the next chapter. You’re stunning and gripping tale has got me hooked, and I am waiting with baited breath for the next chapter.

--Nadia


Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 09/04/12 10:51 · For: One: The Case Against Neville Augustus Longbottom
Well written and a very original plot. A pleasure to read.


Name: PeppermintToads (Signed) · Date: 09/04/12 2:21 · For: One: The Case Against Neville Augustus Longbottom
NOOOOOO!!! NEVILLE!!
You are such a great writer! This story is keeping me on edge and I have a hunch about the sweets, but I'm not sire if I'm right....
This is such a unique and twisting story! I can't wait for the next chapter!


Name: Ginny Weasley Potter (Signed) · Date: 09/03/12 21:46 · For: One: The Case Against Neville Augustus Longbottom
Harry's dilemma is brilliantly described in this chapter. Yes, it's difficult to make an arrest when you actually know the person and though Neville seems perfect for the crime, it seems as though he is not (or maybe he is-- mysteries have a cruel way of twisting and turning). I liked how all of Harry's emotions were well described. Excellent.

Neville made a boo-boo in the questioning. Ah. Of course. That was so in-character for him, once again. I liked Maggie's awkwardness in mentioning sex in front of her mother. Yes.

The toxicology report is good! I don't see why you feel you didn't know what you were doing!

I really liked this chapter and am definitely looking forward to the rest. This is a wonderful story!


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