I like Rita Skeeter stories. I like them because they usually offer something a little different from the usual fanfiction fare of romance or angst. Rita is a great character - one that a writer can really get their teeth into - because she’s smart and manipulative, but there could well be another side to her. I was pleased to see from your summary that there could be a lot more to Rita than just the hard-nosed journalist, and yet you’ve still kept that essential ‘meanness’.
Your set up is good. Trying to get a scoop on Sirius is just the sort of thing Rita would be after, and I particularly liked the information she was getting from her source. Is Bertha the Bertha Jorkins from Goblet of Fire, by the way? That would seem to fit from what we know of canon, as she’s always poking her nose into things.
There were one or two things I was unsure of. First of all, I’m not sure Sirius would have made a will at that time. Of course, it is possible he made a will leaving everything to Harry before he was sent to Azkaban, but the feeling I had from the books was that his will was made much later, when he was alone in Grimmauld Place. The other small point was that I couldn’t picture Rita and Bertha drinking pints as I imagine them drinking something either more refined -like a glass of mead - or at least something in a smaller glass. That is very minor, but the image in my head of the pair of them jarred slightly as I imagined them both with pints of lager.
You haven’t updated for a while, so I do wonder where this is going. Having built up your main characters, and set your scene, I am looking forward to reading more. There’s not a huge hook at the end of the story, but the premise is enough to catch my interest.
Good story. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your thorough review. I will definitely take your points into consideration. Your timing is impeccable, because after all this time, I am currently working on the rest of the story and the next chapters should be up within the next week or so. Thanks again for your review!
Hm, an interesting start :) You've characterized everyone quite well--Bertha Jorkins is just as I imagined her!--and I especially like Gary. I can't wait to hear more from you! :D ~Julie
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you like it!