eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep. I got all goosepimply towards the end (I won;t spoil in case there are readers like you - ha ha ).
Gina, well-crafted and well written. Sorry this is a pants review, but I think you caught the theme of the challenge very well and gave Graham some depth.
VERY well done. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuu, Carole! I keep hoping it's not that bad considering what a flop it's been, lol. I'm glad you liked it. I really enjoyed writing this minor character, strangely enough. Thank you so much for coming to read it, I really appreciate the review!! ~Gina :)
hi :) I wasn't sure what to expect exactly when I started this, and I can say it surprised me how much I liked it! Very original, with a good plot and an unhurried story, Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you took a chance and read it, and I'm really glad you ended up enjoying it! It surprised me at times as I was writing it, lol. Thank you so much for the lovely review, I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)
Gina, I planned on leaving you a SPEW review for this, but I'm so gobsmacked that it would get a terrible score, lolol.
This was fabbbbbbb! And totally unexpected, most definitely.
Okay, I shall start from the beginning. I liked how you introduced Graham, and how he seemed to have had quite a few problems and then rectified them. I definitely think he was given a fitting job, considering what happened to him in the Vanishing Cabinet, and his fear of Apparition made sense.
I loled at Adrian and Gemma, but I did think that when Megan came into the scene, I kind of skimmed over things a bit. If their conversation was written out as dialogue, I think it might have been better, as we were told a lot of things but not really shown them properly. I still think they had good chemistry, but it would've been even better if you had more of their conversation.
*spoiler alert -- DO NOT READ IF YOU HAVEN'T READ THE STORY*
And then they went into the back room. I do think that was written well, and ngl, I didn't understand why Megan was so cold, either. But I'm wondering how it's possible to have sex with a ghost, lolol, considering what they're like in canon. I certainly can buy that Graham wouldn't have noticed that she was a ghost if he was drunk/it was dark/etc. That isn't a nitpick, btw -- I just want to know, as much as Graham does, about how that was even physically possible, lol.
Anyway, picks aside, I thought this was wonderful and ingenious, Gina. (You are a true Claw, hehehe) I expected it just to be a funny parody of Fifty Shades of Suck with a bit of good smut in it, but you made it so much more than that. You added some wonderful depth to Graham's character and Megan's, for that matter, even though she remains a somewhat mystery, lol. This deserves wayyyyyy more than one review, though, so *hugs*
Author's Response: Another review! Squee!! Thank you so much for daring to look at this strange little piece. Gobsmacked, eh? I figure it's not what people might expect, esp. from me. It certainly started out as quite a different idea in my mind. Poke me if you want to know my original plan for parodying 50 Shades, lol. But then it morphed into something more serious, something real. I'm glad you enjoyed it. So two things: first of all, I totally see your point about more dialogue between Graham and Megan. That probably would have built up their connection more, but you know what? I just didn't want to. LOL! I simply felt like glossing over it and getting to the important stuff, so to speak. I just wasn't interested in writing out so much talking over the course of the evening. Ah well, I think it works without it, just maybe not as much. As for the sex/ghost bit - yeah, who knows. I just wanted to leave ghostly clues - cold skin, strange glow, the haunting reference. I didn't stop to think of the mechanics of it. That's for Graham to discover in the DoM, because in my mind, Megan has not only sort of revived him a bit, but also sparked an interest in the subject. He really does try to solve the mystery. Does he? I don't know. Maybe I can write a sequel for another challenge, lol. But it was fun--hard work, but fun in the end--finding all sorts of chantreuse references and working out Graham in my mind. I'm still a bit surprised at ending up with such a decent guy, lol. I'm glad you enjoyed him, and the story, and just THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ACTUALLY REVIEWING THIS!! *hugs* ~Gina :)
Made a nice change. Well done.
Author's Response: I was thinking it was a bit different (for me, at least) as well, so I'm glad you agree. I'm glad you enjoyed it too. Thank you for the review! ~Gina :)