Reviews For Stolen Magic
Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 08/03/12 23:51
Chapter: Prologue - Breaking the News

OHHHH, Ilove this set up, Hannah. Really this is brilliant. Of course they would be resentful, and of course they would harbour this resentment towards the Muggle-borns. Clever set up. I was struck by the characterisation of Adrian - that innate selfishness where he doesn;t want his toys touched - ha - that is SO like children. They rarely see beyond themselves until older and you captured that perfectly.

Really interested to see where this goes. Well done ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Carole! Lovely to hear your opinion on this :D I was worried about making the boys too old so I was careful to keep little elements of childhood in them. I hope you'll like the rest of it too! ~Hannah

Reviewer: Snorkack
Date: 08/03/12 22:19
Chapter: Prologue - Breaking the News

This sounds promising, an excellent idea for a story!! Looking forward to the next chapters!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! The second chapter is up now and hopefully I'll have the third in the next few days. ~coolh5000

Reviewer: expelliarmus17
Date: 08/03/12 21:31
Chapter: Prologue - Breaking the News

Excellent! Great introduction to what is sure to be a great story. Good flow and characterization. I liked the brief point of view of the Healer. My only critique is that you explicitly say that Theia and Adrian are blaming Samuel's lack of magic on someone else, while I think it is implied enough. People aren't usually conscious of blaming other people for their problems, it is just their coping mechanism.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! The critique is very useful - I was a little concerned that I'd overdone the point of them blaming other people for Samuel's lack of magic and made it happen a little too quickly and a little too obviously, so I will go back through and edit a little bit to keep it more implied rather than explicit. Hopefully I'll have more up soon too. ~Hannah

Reviewer: FearlessFlyer
Date: 08/03/12 20:49
Chapter: Prologue - Breaking the News

Good start. I've always wondered what the scenario would be in a family such as this one when they find out that one child is a Squib. I'm looking forward to where this will go - keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! It's an idea I've been toying with for ages so I'm glad to finally get going. Hopefully I'll have more soon :) ~Hannah

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