Reviews For Waiting
Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 08/12/12 21:04
Chapter: Waiting

Yay!!!!!! Goodness, I love the refrain in this poem! It is so beautiful! I especially loved how you broke up the lines and stanzas, because it really stabbed at my heart with each despairing adjective! Really wonderful! My only critique is that you used punctuation wonderfully in the poem, but I feel perhaps that maybe the first stanza could have used some, or maybe been broken up into two stanzas of two lines each. I only say that because there are pretty much two ideas there, and yet they seem to run together in an odd way. It could be that I am reading it wrong. I still loved the poem!!!!!! :) I think the best part was the very end, when You threw in dialogue- I thought that was a great way to make it stand out from her thoughts and emphasize that hope hadn't actually left Ginny! Great job. I hope to read more soon.

Author's Response: Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I've just submitted another poem!!! ~Nidhi

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