Oh, the ending is so, so sad! I so often forget there must be a powerful story to this couple - not only a courtship that ending in her being disowned, but then a war that ended in his tragic death. Merlin, that's sad.
I thought you did a great job weaving the song in. I don't know it, but separating each little scene with it worked really well. And each scene itself painted a lovely picture of their relationship. I really enjoyed it. Lovely job and congrats on the challenge! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: OOOOH, you should listen to the song. Joni Mitchell makes me sigh and cry so so much. Thank you very much for the lovely review, Gina, I did like writing this because I was listening to the song the whole time, but I'm never sure how song fics translate because if you don;t know the song then you're not likely to connect to it. Glad this worked for you, though. ~Carole~
Omg. I actually cried. I can't help it Harry Potter characters major or minor get me all worked up. Lol. Equinox you've done it again. You're my favorite author on this whole site. Keep writing more fabulous stories :)
Author's Response: Wow, thank you very much. :) I think it helped writing a song I really liked because I listened to it continually. Glad you enjoyed it, too. ~Carole~
I love this story, Carole (not that that surprises me...). I think this is one of the best songfics I've read, because instead of the lyrics being thoughts/feelings of the character, she is actually hearing them... I'm hoping this is making sense. I also loved how you used the lyrics to jump between times, because they reminded her of things... it worked beautifully.
At first I was a little surprised that Andromeda was pregnant so young, because as far as I know she had Dora when she was about 20... but of course you wouldn't have made a mistake like that. I think the miscarriage is very interesting here... because, as sad as it is for both of them, it also really draws them together.
I liked your Ted in this - and the contrast you showed when he met Andromeda at the park and was cold, when he'd always been so laid-back. I think he would have to be someone with guts who didn't care what others thought, to have caught her attention in the first place.
I also liked how Andromeda wasn't completely disillusioned with her family - how she somehow wanted to believe that they'd accept Ted/his baby (at the beginning of the fic) - because she's not the same as, say, Sirius, and I think she would want to believe the best of them, if only for herself. (I hope this makes sense?)
I liked the ending - how Andromeda had a sense of foreboding about Ted leaving and perhaps not returning, it just somehow fit with the whole story.
Anyway, I thought this was a great one-shot, and well-written of course as always.
Author's Response: Katrina, thank you so much for the lovely review. This was written for Ales's challenge which I think says the song needs to be physically playing, so credit has to given to her :). I'm glad you liked Andromeda not being completely disillusioned with her family. It's very easy to portray her as exactly the same as Sirius, but she didn;t rebel and get put in a different house, so it's possibly Ted was her first sign of rebellion.
Really appreciate this review, so thank you again. ~Carole~
Amazing. You're my favorite one shot author on this whole darn site. I spent a week last winter staying up til 3 every night reading through all your stories and now I've come to do it again. I'm so excited, its ridiculous. You're amazing!
Author's Response: EEEEP! Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked this one and the others. I'm still writing a lot so you might find some more soon :) ~Carole~
I love it! It is simply beautiful as you weave back and forth between the present and the past in telling your story. I was touched by the pain of a baby lost before they were wed and how they very nearly lost each other. Your stories are so well written I get lost within them and don't want them to ever end. I especially enjoyed your little twist of having Andromeda be the one to suggest that Ted leave for his own safety at the end. I can't remember reading that anywhere else before. This story is simply beautiful from beginning to end and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thank you!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the lovely review. I decided on Andromeda suggesting he leave because although Ted says to Dean that he decided he would leave knowing his wife would be safe, I couldn;t see him wanting to leave her because Andromeda could well have been in danger from Bellatrix, so Andromeda telling him to go seemed logical. Glad you enjoyed the story. ~Carole~
Thank you for writing this-I've always felt Andromeda was a vastly underutilized character in canon. Please write more. And Regulus too.
Author's Response: OOOh ... Regulus, now you've got me thinking... Hmmm. Thank you very much for the review and glad you enjoyed this. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you very much. ~Carole~
Oh wowwww this was so beautiful! And the ending was so, so, so sad! I loved the idea of this story. You are such a great writer! :D
Author's Response: Thank you very much. Glad you enjoyed the story. The song is utterly beautiful, I'm still singing it *sigh* ~Carole~
That was amazing! How do you get published so fast, by the way?
Author's Response: Magic? (Thank you very much ~Carole)
Author's Response: Thank you. ~Carole~