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Name: Nagini Riddle (Signed) · Date: 11/08/13 22:49 · For: Chapter 1
So, I have returned to give a much longer (okay, much more in depth) review! :)

First, I am amazed at the ideas you came up with to describe Gellert, because I always have trouble coming up with these types of connections that don't actually exist in canon but have to come from my own perceptions. So kudos to you! The first stanza is rather perfect- I mean, you captured Grindelwald's intrigue and tempting personality, but showed how dangerous he was, and you did so in a refreshing way. True, sweets are usually used to show temptation, but I loved that Grindelwald was a "basket...[l]ined with glass shards." It really demonstrates the effect that he has on other people, pulling them in with his dreams and ideas, but he is not altogether a good person- that is, he is ambitious and his morals allow him to do just about anything in order to achieve his goals, and therefore, he is very much like sharp glass in a basket.

The second stanza, I think, is my favorite of them all. First, you used "lilting," which is quickly becoming one of my favorite words. So that definitely gains you some stars. But this is where I felt you really captured the image JKR painted for us readers- that of a laughing, golden-haired boy. Here is a playful nature associated with him, and he pretty much has a youthful spirit.

The next few stanzas once more reiterated that sense of Grindelwald reeling people in. It's what people in power do: they want followers. And people who are seeking power seek followers as well. So for me, this shows that Grindelwald has been the same man all his life, always enticing people into his plans and gathering followers.

Shift in tone! I am assuming that the second to last stanza refers to his reign, and subsequently, his downfall with the battle against Dumbledore. Here, though, is where his true colors are shown. What I really liked was the tie-in here to Harry- it was interesting that you described Gellert as a lightning bolt when one decorates the forehead of Harry. :) Not sure if it was intentional, but I think it's a nice way of relating lightning to power, and perhaps not always good power. I mean, Zeus was the god of lightning- and he wasn't exactly friendly or kind. And the lightning bolt on Harry came from an evil curse and power. And here, Gellert has power, but he is misusing it, and the chaos he creates is similar to a lightning storm. It was an excellent analogy. :)

And then the last stanza captures him in his last days. He is no longer a basket, but a bag of bones. The transition was very nice! It kind of makes me pity Gellert, because in the end, he is just like any other man, destined to die, and all that power couldn't have stopped it. If only he had seen it sooner...

So, in case you couldn't tell, I loved this poem! I liked the transitions, and how this poem not only defined Gellert, but also followed the path he took in life, demonstrating that the choices he made only led to him regretting what he had done, instead of being a happy man in power. It's a good lesson to learn, really: power doesn't necessarily equate to happiness and invincibility (and immortality). You would think man would have learned that by now from all the history we learn. Alas, men always seem to think they can do better than those before them.

Okay, enough of that tangent. Great poem, Carole. :) I have enjoyed reading and learning from it! ~Nagini

Author's Response: Thank you very much. Yes, i like the word lilting, too, but I possibly overuse it, especially in poetry - ooops - so I'm trying to wean myself off it - ha ha.

The lightning bolt and Harry reference was intentional because we always associate lightning with Harry and something good, but really he had the scar because of something destructive. And Gellert was a destructive person, until the end when I think he showed real regrets. -sigh- Thank you, again ~Carole~

Name: psijupiter (Signed) · Date: 10/25/13 14:00 · For: Chapter 1
This is a really nice poem with some lovely contradictory imagery. I especially like the image of he lightning bolt 'arcing destruction.' The pattern of the poem works well for me and it has a nice rhythm that drew me along. I liked the change of rhythm in the last stanza, it added to the darker imagery you wrote and brought the poem to and end for me.

The last stanza (and the talk of sweets at the begining!) makes me feel like this poem comes from Dumbledore's perspective, I don't know if that is what you intended? It is a very effective poem though. I don't think I've read much about Grindlewald and this poem makes him intriguing!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. Hmm, it wasn't really from Dumbledore's perspective but rather it was how I saw Grindelwald's appeal to Dumbledore. That possibly amounts to the same thing. :) . Thanks again. ~Carole~

Name: Nagini Riddle (Signed) · Date: 07/18/12 15:31 · For: Chapter 1
Yay! A definition poem of some sort. I loved the crab apple tree part. An the lightning part. and the bag of bones part. Okay, all the parts. :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I liked the definition poems , they were fun. ~Carole~

Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 07/18/12 12:30 · For: Chapter 1
I love the sweet basket lined with glass shards image. As well as the sofa so comfortable and engulfing. Powerful.

Author's Response: Thank you! I had the idea of the basket forst of all and then the rest developed. :) ~Carole~

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