PSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSST Natatatatatatalie my eternal love and sunshine!
I really, really love this. I never thought I could get into a prose poem as much as this, but there you are! The more I look at this poem, the more I realise how structured and how poetry-like it is. The repetition of the date, for one, gives it such clear structure.
But most of all, what I love about this is the language. It's very VERY rhythmical, and just so touching in its simplicity. I felt so, SO sorry for Petunia, because deep down, she's not a terrible person. We saw glimpses of that in the books, and she would have changed after the war as well. Especially since Dudley changed. So yes, I was incredibly sad that she was alone on her birthday, that she had to eat on her own - and then of course so happy and relieved when Dudley and Harry arrived! And yes, there was a tear in the corner of my eye!
The language paints such a beautiful picture of Petunia's neat and orderly life, how she's built it forever, and works so hard to maintain it. All that makes the emotions so much stronger.
I can't properly talk about poetry, but I want you to know that this is great, and it's so deserving of the joint win! Congraaaatulations on that and well done!!! I'm glad I got to read this.
Author's Response: THANK YOU! :D I am glad I won (along with Her Excellence) and that brought you here! This review gives me so much happinesssss <333 How come I never responded to the other reviews? I am such a grade-A butthole. >.<
I loved this in PA even though I don't think I left a review.... But it is gorgeous prose! And I feel so bad for petunia. I'm happy to be seeing so many petunia stories now! Jut because it means that we realize Muggles are a part of this world, too! :)
I love the May 4th refrain. And thank god she didn't invite Marge.
This is so perfect. You managed to characterise Petunia so perfectly and in so few words, yet you also managed to garner some sympathy for her.
Vernon was a photograph, and photographs don’t get invitations (or it would be abnormal)
So sad ... for Petunia, her rock has gone and no one seems to care. I was pleased you resolved this with Harry and Dudley turning up at the end. having harry there was so right because I think he would forgive her, and would realise how alone Petunia is. Hmm, I wonder, the fact that Harry is speaking first makes me wonder if he reminded Dudley and not the other way around.
Spaghetti Bolognese .... what are you implying?
Great poem. You managed to still keep a lyrical structure to the piece despite it not being set out in a normal poetic form. (Makes me wonder what Petunia would think about it. I bet she hates free verse - LOL) ~Croll~