Reviews For Broken
Reviewer: MichelleWeasley2000
Date: 11/19/12 17:55
Chapter: There are different types of crazy.

Aw, great job. An unusual pairing, but well-written.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you liked it. :)


Reviewer: silverlining95
Date: 08/31/12 13:11
Chapter: There are different types of crazy.

I finally got round to reading this after remembering you mentioning it in the CR and I'm lost for words.

Whatever I expected, this wasn't it. You made a pairing that seemed completely implausible work, and in such a powerful way. I may even start shipping them now...

Fenella x

Author's Response: Hi, Fenella! :)

Thank you so much for the review. I know it was surprising, but I'm so glad you liked it. Jess would be proud if you started shipping Ron/Pansy. :)


Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 07/27/12 12:35
Chapter: There are different types of crazy.

I thought this was a very interesting story - you really made Pansy into a fascinating character. It's interesting how you mix the spell the Carrows cast on her with what's already going on in her head - even without the spell, she would probably have been in a mess, but it just exacerbates it. It was sometimes painful (in a good way) to read what the voices were saying, because people who suffer mental disorders really do hear those things, and clearly they're so real for Pansy... it was heart-breaking when she almost killed herself.

Ron is very interesting in this too - while this doesn't fit my head canon, it's a believable path he could have taken, especially if Hermione broke up with him. And I liked that he did learn to care for Pansy, because he can be quite prejudiced towards Slytherins in canon (and not just the ones who've done badly by him), but he learns to see her as a human.

I liked your idea of Pansy's Mum, and that she started Pansy's problems and then went into hiding and left her daughter to fend for herself - it sounds like she was a pretty cold and selfless person, and the constant telling Pansy she wasn't good enough would obviously have had an effect.

I thought you did a really good job handling a difficult topic like a mental disorder, especially since a lot of it was more or less from Pansy's point of view (thought not first person) - it was believable, and I really felt like I got inside Pansy's very messed-up head.


Author's Response: Yay! Thanks for the lovely review, Katrina! :D

Pansy is a challenge. This is the second time I've tried writing her, and I'm glad it was believable. I was worried about the 'voices' when I was writing this as well; I didn't want it to seem (as horrible as it is) cliché, so I'm glad that it was right. Ron: I kind of played off his angstier side. The hardest part about this fic was actually getting them together because of their obvious differences. Pansy's Mum, well, I always think there's a reason Pansy was the way she was at school. When it was just her mum, I think Pansy was more angry than anything.

Thank you so much for the amazing review, Katrina, and I'm really glad you liked it! :D

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 07/25/12 16:06
Chapter: There are different types of crazy.

Well, Ellie, this is really good. You actually made me feel sorry for Pansy, who is a character I rarely think about at all, except as Draco’s stalker. I liked the relationship you showed with her mother. It’s pretty likely she was an unpleasant woman, something like Sirius’ mum probably. Even without the Carrows’ voices, I think she could’ve ended up where she was. She never had anyone in her corner, and then she lost Draco.

I liked drunk, depressed Ron, too. I actually haven’t read him like this before. I usually find Harry and/or Draco in this position, but it’s just as likely to happen to Ron, maybe even more so since he’s always been so bad at shutting out his emotions and hurt. I didn’t hate Ron in this story, so good job with that.

I found a typo though: She did receive an odd lock from the person next to her… Obviously, that was meant to be look.

I’m also a bit confused about Hermione. Who is she supposed to be dating in this? I swear, Pansy said Draco was with to Ron’s ex lover, but later in the story Ron says Hermione’s with Krum. Did I miss something? By the way, I vote for Dramione. That would be the most upsetting for both of your main characters.

Anyway, this was a fun read. Reading more about Pansy was great. You did a good job making her believable and human, which isn’t easy.

*pats Ellie with the Lucius-like pimp cane*

Author's Response: YAY! I'm so glad you read this, Ella! :D I have started to begin to write Pansy. It stated with a femmeslash for my friend Lily, and then this. I don't know what it is; there just has to be something more to her character. I'm glad the mental disorder didn't scare you off, though. Her mother just seems like the type to constantly insult her daughter. And you're probably right; she would end up somewhere like that eventually.

As for Ron, I thought he would seem the most likely. In the CR, we've discussed his many jealousy-fulled, angsty times, and he would probably be in a bad place after losing Hermione. The typo; I've been meaning to fix that. Someone commented on it on another sight.

I'm pretty sure Hermione's with Krum, but I'll look into fixing it. I think I meant to be talking about dear Astoria ... I'm really glad you think this was a fun read, though. :) I haven't heard many people say that about my writing. Thank you so much for the fabulous review, Ella! I'm so glad you liked it!

*does something cool with the pimp cane*

Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 07/14/12 20:46
Chapter: There are different types of crazy.

wow! i am all for odd pairings, and i really enjoyed this! what a dark/angsty story! you are really good at this. :)
maybe you could try another strange pairing?

Author's Response: I'm glad you like odd pairings. I blame Jess (ToBeOrNotToTypeThisAllOut) for Ron/Pansy. And, yeah, D/A is kind of my thing. I'll try another odd pairing, soon; I promise. I'm glad you like it, and thanks for the review!


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