This is an interesting poem. I like the way you remind us of the four houses that made Hogwarts and how each had their merits that combined to make something great. Then the folly of Salazar Slytherin leaving the school, which really set up the hatred felt for the next thousand years. It’s a bitter story, but we know it has a good ending through our very special ‘trio’ which you reference beautifully at the end.
I do have some grammatical nit picks for you. however:
One whom fades away from the dream, however,
It should be ‘who’ and not ‘whom’.
And this line:
And the same fight rages until it's end.
It should be ‘its’ and not ‘it’s’ because the former is possessive and the latter means ‘it is’.
I’m unsure about the image of the ‘wandering badger’ because it seems to me that it was Salazar who left, and the badgers are the ones that stay put, preparing for battle and staying loyal.
I like the way you end this with so many knowing they must fight and win. The last line regarding harry having to do the final part of the Battle alone is very poignant. Well done. ~Carole~
What, no snake???? :) beautiful! I really enjoyed the messaging of uniting for a common cause! :)
Author's Response: Nagini Riddle, WOOHOO! MY FIRST EVER REVIEW!!!(: I am so you glad that you enjoyed reading my poem! And yeah, there is no snake unfortunately. He was the one that was shunned away from the other three because his views were different. But in the end, "three will become one and one will become all." In my line of sight, all four Houses will re-unite and the balance will be stronger than ever. I am so glad that you enjoyed my poem! Thank you so much for being my first review ever and hopefully there are much more to come! I will be posting many more of my works and maybe the one from booksie that you thought sounded much like Dumbledore's ideas. Thanks again, Nagini Riddle for reading and reviewing this poem, ~crbluvsravenclaw (Cris)!!!(: