Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 11/30/13 14:50
Chapter: Ron and Hermione's Christmas Wedding

This is a sweet poem. I love the idea of Hermione reflecting on her wedding just as she's at the altar because I think it's very much in keeping with her character. You also have some lovely sentiments here regarding Ron and Hermione's relationship:

This isn’t a day for arguments/ Though to say we argue through love is to say the truth

This was a great way of summing them up.

I think parts of the poem could be slightly improved upon. I wasn't sure what was happening with the punctuation because at times you were meticulous, and yet none of the end lines have any commas or fullstops and it was a little bit distracting not to have it, when you used commas in the middle of lines. Also, the length of the lines caught me off-guard a little. It might read better if you turned each stanza into six lines, rather than four. But that's personal preference.

I liked the last stanza best, with Hermione calling Ron a fool when she wants a kiss. Very nice.

Well done. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 07/06/12 20:49
Chapter: Ron and Hermione's Christmas Wedding

What a fun poem! I just love poetry of any kind (if you happen to look at my written stories and the reviews I've written, I think you would see that) and I really enjoyed this sweet poem! That last stanza just made me laugh! It captured Hermione perfectly. :)

~Nagini Riddle

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