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Reviewer: JCJ58
Date: 07/09/12 0:41
Chapter: Chapter 1 The House of Abel

looking forward to more of your story

Reviewer: crbluvsravenclaw
Date: 07/08/12 21:48
Chapter: Chapter 1 The House of Abel

Yay! Your first review! I really liked this chapter and I can't wait until chapter two is up!

" For Jenny was looking at the floor, {he} hands under her upper legs which were swinging slowly." You have a tiny mistake in this part. It should be her instead of he... Other than that, there's no other mistakes that I found and like I said before, it was an amazing chapter and can't wait to see what's next. I want to read about their lives at Hogwarts right now so submit the next chapter soon and keep me updated!(:

Author's Response: Thank You! I have sent Chapter Two to by beta reader so as soon as its ready I'll submit it here.

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