By no means am I an expert on poetry, so I'm really not sure quite what to say. But you took the time to stop by and review my poetry, so I figured I would do the same for you. :)
This poem was absolutely breathtaking. This is one of the most unique views on the relationship between Harry and his mother that I've seen, and it's very saddening. However, while the length of it is impressive I think it takes away from the overall depth of the poem.
Her hand, no longer held out,
Yet still lingers
With the promise of protection.
This is a perfect way to describe the protection that Lily's sacrifice provided for Harry.
His hand, young and small,
Briefly touches the mirrored glass
And this really captures Harry's deepest desire, when he looks into the Mirror of Erised. However, that last line is the one that really got to me...
And they will, one day, clasp each other again.
This poem is a wonderful view on the love between Lily and her orphaned son. Well done. :) ~Ashleigh
Author's Response: Wow!!! Thanks for taking the time to review. Sorry if the length was too long, but I really wanted to capture every essence I could of their relationship, and also how they mirror each other in their sacrifice. :)
I noticed that you made You Want To Make A Memory by Potter, one of your favorite stories... Did you read the whole thing? What did you think of it?? I did and I loved every bit of it!(:
Author's Response: I absolutely adored that story- that's why it is in my favorites. I also left a review behind for it, albeit short, since I was in great awe over it. :) I just loved the little details the author used, and the story made me cry at the end! I felt so bad for Remus! At least in the end he made up with Sirius! FYI, if you wish to contact me, use the contact button on my author page. You don't have to use the review button! :) And if you wish to read more of my poetry, visit my thread on the beta boards in Poetry Anyone? My thread is called the Slithering Snake... :) Maybe you will join?
I too nominated your poem to win best poetry because you deserve it!!!(: I can't wait to read your other poems and I can't wait until you read my poem! It's not accept onto this site, yet, but when it is, I can't wait to he's what you think!!!(:
~Cris!(:
Author's Response: Thank you so much!!!!!!!! You don't know how much that means to me! :) I'll be sure to keep an eye out for your poetry and other stories!
Wow!(: (11/10) And no, that isn't a mistake!(:
~Cris
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so flattered by your review! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
This is captivating and beautiful. I nominated it for best poetry in the 2012 QSQ.~Nidhi
Author's Response: Oh, Nidhi Thank you do much!!!!!!! You don't know how flattered I am to here that!
I love this poem! I don't usually read poetry (yours is the first poem I've read on this site) and I thought that this was really beautiful. Seriously. I couldn't write poetry to save my life, but you certainly can! I loved it, and I almost cried at the end. Good job!
*Cailee
Author's Response: I'm really happy to hear that! Thank you! I was inspired by my baby sister, who loves to lay her head down on my hand. I thought then that a story from the perspective of loving hands would be interesting! Thank you for your review! It has made my day!
