Hi, Nagini. Silly me, I never realized that you had written this wonderful piece. I was trolling through the dark/angsty fics, reading or half-reading many that did not move me, and then I saw this one. It is a gem.
It is dark, yes, but hardly angsty. Tom is not suffering, he is absolutely jubilant. You have taken a brief span of time, covering only a few minutes, a relatively short distance, and a simple set of actions â€” he walks in the house and Avada-Kedavras three people â€” and broken it down into every thought, every observation, every sensation, every emotion that Tom has during that little span. And you do it without overly flowery language or unnecessary flashbacks that would detract from the tight focus that you have achieved.
You story is completely open and understandable. Every thought that Tom has is so obvious, so inevitable, so right for him. You have must have spent a fair amount of time combing through his brain so thoroughly, so as to not leave any of his thoughts unstated. His pride, his ambition, his vanity, his hubris, his glee, his hatred, his vengeance, his scorn, his contempt, his angerâ€¦it is all there. One can hardly remember that this person started life as a human being.
I cannot think of any of your prose works that I like better than this one. You have outdone yourself.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you, Vicki! That is extremely high praise... :) I am glad that you enjoyed this piece. I hope you read the companion poem that goes along with it, called The Unexpected Turn. It's from Tom Riddle Sr's perspective. :) Happy New Year, Vicki!!!!! And keep on reading and writing. ~Nagini
As for concerns, there are none! This was so nice and dark and after reading that last poem of yours, I see that you like writing about Tom Riddle and that you do have no problems with writing dark stuff.
I really enjoyed every word of this, uh, poem, story? It was obviously when Voldemort had killed his paternal side of the family. You do so well! and for my last review, I meant to put this...
(1,000,000,000,000,000,000/10) That's my rating for that poem and for this one!!!(:
Author's Response: Thanks! I have to admit, I was scared to write dark things, and I had trouble with it! Now it seems that is all I can write! I find it easier to get darker and darker!!!! I try to write happy things, but they become dark... It makes for an interesting time of writing! I really appreciate your review! Thank you!!!
HELLO ! :D First of all, let me say how thrilled I am that one of my fics inspired you to write something. Secondly, I enjoyed this a lot. There is something very ... exhibitionist and eager and bitter about the way Tom speaks in this fic, which is how I pictured him at that moment in his life. The ending is very much in character.
Last, but not the least, your prose is quite lucid.
Well done, Kaylee! I'm honoured. :)
Author's Response: You have just made my day!!! I wasn't sure this fic would get through, but I was pleasantly surprised when it did! I'm glad you got to be the first to review!!! I truly meant it when I said your story, The Receding, inspired me. I read it and thought, "Wow, what a great story! Now I need to kill Tom sr off for her!" *chuckles* you are a great inspiration to me. I hope I get to continue to read your writing, and also hope that I keep getting inspired to write! ~Kaylee