Reviews For Half-life
Reviewer: teh tarik
Date: 11/14/12 18:04
Chapter: One-shot

This is a wonderful story. Breathtaking, emotional, poignant without being sentimental. Great characterisation, lovely attention to detail, smooth transitions between the two POVs. The dialogue is natural, although the metaphor explanation is a bit long. The relationship between Molly and Neville is unusual but so well-developed.

I love the ending paragraph, and I love the usage of future tense for the last couple of sentences e.g. "Neville will write to Romilda...Molly will smile and give advice."

That was perfect. Thanks for writing this.

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 06/16/12 4:37
Chapter: One-shot

Awwwww this left me smiling! I love they found each other! Wonderfully done!

Reviewer: Acacia Carter
Date: 06/16/12 3:36
Chapter: One-shot

Your Neville. Just... your Neville. His confusion after sleeping with Romilda. His attachment to his parents. You've got him down and I love him.
Molly's quiet desperation is lovely, as well. I normally don't read AUs, because they're rarely done as well as you've done this. Watching Molly try to piece together her family after Arthur's death was heartbreaking, but there was a certain grim determination to it that kept her from seeming completely helpless - which is definitely in line with her character.
The discussion about half-lifes was a little odd, but made sense once I thought about it for a while. Not a concept I ever thought I'd see come up in a Potter fic. :)
And like Soraya, I'm relieved that you didn't ship them!

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 06/15/12 10:14
Chapter: One-shot

Oh hahahahahaaaaaa. For some reason, I actually thought you were going to ship them lolol.

THIS WAS FAB. I don't usually like AU, as I'm sure you know, but I did think it would be interesting if Arthur died. You did a great job showing how Molly would've reacted if he had died, and I LOVE YOUR NEVILLE. He's adorable :)

I would've left a longer review, but I have to get back to biology/statistics/maths. D: Heart youuuuu for writing it, though! I love it when I can infect people's minds with my weird ideas *giggles madly*

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