Actually, I think it worked great. It made sense that Dumbledore knew about Sirius- or else how could Sirius have gotten away with what he did? Also, if Dumbledore did know about Sirius, he wouldn't have been so scared for his students, and in the books, he didn't act like he was, not like in the sixth book when he had extra security on the castle. Your explanation is sound with me!
Keep up the good work! I'm very impressed with your work.
Author's Response: I'm glad this missing moment seemed appropriate to you; I wondered why Dumbledore had been so calm about the whole thing in PoA as well, and this was my response to it as an author, hehe. :) Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!
You write somewhere in the middle: ". . .When I tried to kill Peter--and believe me, I tried--I saw him change into a rat right before I cast the spell. He escaped, and I've been searching for him ever since, a rat with a missing toe."
I always saw it at this that Sirius thought he had killed Peter, until the time twelve years later when he looks at the Daily Prophet. If he knew Peter had been alive all along, why would he wait for such a long time?
It's a lovely story, well-written. I like the addition of the italics thoughts a lot, such as the 'Justice. Redemption' bit.
I'm curious what you think about the above.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! That's an interesting perspective on it; it would make total sense in canon, I suppose. The mindset from which I wrote this story is that Sirius knew he failed, but he couldn't find Peter... how do you find a rat in the middle of London, you know? It could be anywhere! And once he saw that Daily Prophet article, he finally had enough of a clue to go for it. Do you know if canon gives us any hints either way as to what happened? If so, I can probably alter the story to match your POV; it should be a relatively easy change to make, since it wouldn't alter Sirius' characterization or actions in this story in any major way... Let me know! And thanks again for the thoughtful comment; I appreciate your reading and reviewing. :)