I will be the first review, because I am a review fairy, and just have to leave behind reviews!
I love the message this conveyed- I think you could have played around more with the structure, though. Don't be afraid to break up the lines in between the sentences! When you do, you emphasize certain words and ideas. In the format it is right now, it seems more like prose, which is fine, and still poetic, but I think this poem would have worked well with the structure divided up on a different way.
That being said, I still enjoyed the poem! Have you thought of joining Poetry Anyone? in the beta forums? People over there will be able to give you more constructive critiques, and you will find that their advice really helps your poetry become flawless! :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for being the first reviewer! I figured I needed a more optimistic poem to balance out the last one, so I came up with this. Although I've always loved the type of poems that rhyme, they've always been very difficult for me. Occassionally experimenting with rhymes is fun, but I'm finding that the non-rhyming type is probably more my style. I could definitely work on the structure more, and I might play with that a little more next time. I really appreciate your advice with that. And I've definitely thought about joining Poetry Anyone in the very near future, so hopefully I'll be a part of that soon. :) Thanks again for the review! ~Ashleigh