Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 11/27/12 5:32
Chapter: Road to Ruin
For being two such bright, feisty young girls, I always though Ginny and Hermione were rather silly in thier reaction to Fleur. Although, that makes them more real and endearing as characters. You got Ron really well in this chapter, and Fleur was wonderful- it's great how she knew the nickname- but I've always wanted to read Bill's reaction. Do you think you'll do that next chapter? Or if you want to jump events you could include Bill's reaction in flashback mode? Pretty please?
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) Yeah, but she was beautiful and the boys they liked had both noticed. Some kind of primal instinct kicks in in that situation. I was worried about Fleur so I'm glad you think I did her justice. Bill does show up in a couple of chapters time, but his reaction to this isn't shown. It is something I'd like to write as a separate story eventually though.
Reviewer: heliopath
Date: 11/25/12 14:09
Chapter: Twelve Practically Fail-Safe Ways to Charm Hermione
I love this story. Its so close to the actual story. Easily one of my favourite fanfictions. And its so refreshing for me to read it in moments of respite in my really long and exhausting exams. Anxiously looking forward to your next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) Good luck with your exams! Nice reviews are great for breaking up time spent studying as well, so thank you!
Reviewer: PeppermintToads
Date: 11/23/12 13:08
Chapter: Twelve Practically Fail-Safe Ways to Charm Hermione
Ooh, cliff-hanger! I went and scrolled through a few of the previous chapters before reading this one to refresh my memory, and I can't believe how much they've grown up. You let this happen just like J.K. Rowling does--gradually, so that we barely notice. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) Not too much of a cliffie, seeing as we all know how it ends! Thank you! It was hard to remember that 11 year old Ron was completely different to 15 year old Ron.
Reviewer: anki91
Date: 11/21/12 1:21
Chapter: Twelve Practically Fail-Safe Ways to Charm Hermione
You should somehow just publish this thing. ^_^
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Haha, I'm sure I could take on JKR's legal team if I tried really hard...
Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 11/20/12 19:05
Chapter: Twelve Practically Fail-Safe Ways to Charm Hermione
Brilliant!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
Reviewer: Dad
Date: 11/20/12 11:08
Chapter: Twelve Practically Fail-Safe Ways to Charm Hermione
I liked the way you handled how Hermione wiped her patents memories.
Author's Response: Thanks! That part has been written so many times, so I'm glad that you liked my version :)
Reviewer: Riddle Magnus
Date: 11/20/12 9:28
Chapter: Twelve Practically Fail-Safe Ways to Charm Hermione
Ron's last conversation with Fred. Now I'm depressed :(
But awesome story though :)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) Yeah, I wanted to give the brothers a chance to say goodbye, even if it was months before Fred dies. Glad you're enjoying the story though!
Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 11/20/12 6:54
Chapter: Twelve Practically Fail-Safe Ways to Charm Hermione
This is one of your best chapters till date- brilliant. I was sobbing through the first part and the scene between Fred and George would have got me sobbing again if that "Asymmetrical Wonder" line didn't turn up.
Author's Response: Thank you! Ear humour from the twins does tend to cure tears :)
Reviewer: kheldar
Date: 11/19/12 17:03
Chapter: Shades of Lavender: Transparent
Gah! At the risk of gushing like a fanboy, I'm just love everything of yours that I've read, and this story most of all. I think it's probably one of the best missing-moments stories out there - I'm seriously considering starting a petition to get you to write missing moments for the whole saga. You didn't have anything else to do, right?
Love the chess match, by the way - particularly the thought of Ron ambushing Hermione by letting her think that she would finally win in the midst of his utter distraction, and still pulling out a win at the last minute.
And now the debate - do I read the rest of this on FF.net, or do I draw out the enjoyment by reading it as it comes here on MNFF? The agony of choice!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing again! In case you hadn't already noticed, compliments tend to make me awkward and I'm kind of on the floor dribbling right now. Take this as a massive thank you. If you are willing to pay me and this doesn't break any laws, then yeah, sure! Well, if you can resist, then remaining chapters on FF.net are riddling with even more mistakes (I think was allergic to commas when I first wrote it) than this version and will be tidied up a bit for when they are put here. But it is your choice. Either way, they end up together *SPOILER ALERT*
Reviewer: anki91
Date: 11/19/12 4:11
Chapter: Shades of Lavender: Transparent
Wow! Its really amazing the way you've linked the years together! Its almost as though this was what was going through JKR's head while writing the books. Its brilliant!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far.
Reviewer: Laura22
Date: 11/17/12 18:40
Chapter: Shades of Lavender: Transparent
It's so rare finding fanfiction that truly captures the original author's style - word choice and voice especially - and stays true to the characters. You do both so well! I love all your submissions, but this series especially. Definitely the best missing scenes I've found of Ron and Hermione!! Thank you for submitting, I look forward to your next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) I actually tried to make it similar to JKR's style so that the moments could be slipped into the books so thank you very much for saying that you think it's similar. And thank you for the rest of the kind words :)
Reviewer: tonks58
Date: 11/17/12 17:53
Chapter: Shades of Lavender: Transparent
Quite frankly this one of the best missing moments fan fiction I have ever read, if not the best. Great work!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) Wow. That means a lot so thank you so much :)
Reviewer: Dad
Date: 11/17/12 10:49
Chapter: Shades of Lavender: Transparent
It is so good that they are getting there. Lovely story.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Yes, but they still have to get through the locket and everything else yet...
Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 11/16/12 21:45
Chapter: Shades of Lavender: Transparent
Oh, another great chapter. :)
I must admit, I wonder if Ron would really have been so upset about Harry and Ginny. I've not reread HBP in ages, but I thought Ron had just given Harry a look of shock, followed by a look that said, "Well, if you must." That, to me, is more like acceptance, even if he is surprised, which he certainly would be. I do like the scene you've written, there are some great moments there, and the chess game is FAB! Just not sure he would have needed so much talking around over the H/G kiss. Really nice read though.
The second scene in this chapter is my favorite thing you've written so far. I've always believed something serious happened in Ron's head with Dumbledore's death, and it materialized there at the funeral with Hermione. Something in those weeks from him being poisoned to the funeral really grew him up. You wrote that transition beautifully, with the added bonus of having Ron thinking through that transition himself. "When did we grow up?" Loved that so much.
Their conversation on the platform... just GUSHHHHH. So good! I think it would have been something like this for sure, with the awkwardness, but also the realization that they both knew there was something more there. I think so too. Their apologies for the missed gifts expressed everything, and served as the apologies they really both ought to make for their insane behavior all year. Most heartbreaking moment: "Next year, eh?" So Ron to say that, and yet, we know next Christmas is going to SUUUUUUUUCK!!!
Wow, this is long and rambly, sorry. Loving this piece, is what I wanted to say. Also, I may have to skip your next installment, as I'm currently writing Hermione's arrival at the Burrow before they go get Harry. Haha! Great minds think alike, right? I don't want to be influenced by your take, as I know I will like it. So if you write that bit, I'll catch up with the next installment.
Thanks for another great read. Happy writing!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
Ron's reaction to Harry and Ginny here is more him trying to work out if he is a brother or a best friend first. I don't think he had any serious objections, he just felt that he should have some serious objections. Plus the poor boy was in shock. Yeah, it's when he switches from liking Hermione and not knowing what to do to actually trying to show her how he feels. Maturing!Ron is a lot of fun because he is such a complex character.
Awkward goodbyes, filled with unsaid things are kind of what these two do best so I'm glad you liked that bit. Although the present thing was a bit cruel of me... Long and rambly is fine, haha! That's cool, the next chapter is two parts and the first part is Hermione arriving at the Burrow but the second is the wedding. Maybe a bit of quick scrolling and you'll be okay? Also, can't wait for your take on that part - good luck with it! :)
Reviewer: wanderingflobberworm
Date: 11/16/12 16:43
Chapter: Shades of Lavender: Transparent
Another fantastic chapter! This story always makes me laugh.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! It all gets a bit angsty from this point onwards, but I will try and keep the funnies coming. Glad you enjoyed it :)
Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 11/16/12 3:28
Chapter: Shades of Lavender: Transparent
"He was sure that if anything could charm Hermione it would be a book." -I laughed out loud at this- (yes, the full form, because LOL doesn't quite cover it). Ron, oh Ron.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
Haha, I'm so glad I'm not the only one who takes the time to write the full form, along with an explanation as to why I've written it out in full form.
Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 11/15/12 17:38
Chapter: Shades of Lavender: Transparent
That was a brilliant ending right there!! I love how you worked that book in there!!! Fabulous!!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) The book has to make an appearance somewhere and Fred and George make any scene they're in.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 11/03/12 6:26
Chapter: How the Cookie Krumbles
Actually dying .... Hermione was helping Krum with the second task in exchange for him joining spew.
This has just caused me to stop breathing. OMG he's so thick!
I will admit to feeling some trepidation when you introduced Lavender. Warning for you: I love the girl and write her a lot, mainly because she always gets such a bad deal in fanfic from the whole 'won-won' incident. yes, she was a mush head, but he behaved badly as well. Sorry, strayed off the point, I liked your Lavender here because although she was quite clothes and hair obsessed (which I think is very very normal having been like that myself), she isn;t downright b*tchy about the other girls or disparaging about what they're wearing.
I also liked the detail about the Hufflepuff girl being in awe of Harry, and no one really understanding why - ha ha.
Great chapter ~Carole~
Author's Response: He's not so much thick, as suffering with a severe case of major denial. Well, I hope I do her justice in later chapters. As much as I love Ron, I'm under no impression that he was the good guy in that whole situation - quite the opposite in fact - so hopefully won-won-era Lavender won't be too bad. I really don't think she was a b!tch either - just a bit... vapid maybe. Haha, it's just not a Potter fic if there isn't a bit Harry Freaking Potter in there really.
Anyway, thanks for reading and I hope you enjoy the rest :)
Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 11/03/12 5:21
Chapter: Ron Notices That Hermione Is A Girl In 5, 4, 3. . .
Just catching up with your story now and what fun it is! (excuse me for the cheesy opening line.)
I'm enjoying this set of missing moments between Ron and Hermione. When I read the books I always thought they'd end up together (unlike the Harry/Hermione shippers) and this reads as very close to canon. I love your characterisation which I think you've nailed with both your protagonists as well as your more minor characters (Ginny and Harry.) In this chapter I particularly liked how similar Ron and Ginny are because I like to think of them as close.
Harking back to chapter one (should have left a review there, really) I very much liked the way Hermione and Ron escaped from the chess board and through the trap door. I have never really thought about them getting out, I suppose I assumed Dumbledore just arrived and made it all better, but Ron having the idea about the brooms ... fantastic! It really was a great touch.
I liked the detail about the pimple cream (shame she didn't send some to poor Eloise Midgen) and her awkwardness now she realsies she fancies Ron. One minor quibble: I don't think anyone else would have overheard Viktor asking Hermione to the Ball because that tyoe of news would have circulated five times around the castle on the first day, and not stayed secret for a month until the event. I know Harry and Ron are notoriously slow on the uptake, but I think even they'd have heard by then. - very measley quibble, though.
Another thing you might want to check through are some capitalisations: for example it should be Muggle and Dementor. - Sorry, I really am being miserly, but am very much enjoying the story,and must now get on with reading the rest of it.
~Carole~
Author's Response: Haha, pfft - the more cheese, the better!
Thank you! I was always behind these two as well - I just can't see them with other people. Well, Dumbledore showing up tends to solve most things so that's very understandable. Eloise Midgen was beyond help unfortunately. That... that is a very good point. Um... maybe the girls thought if they pretended that they hadn't heard, then it wouldn't be true? Maybe? No, that's fine! I'm always missing them so thank you for pointing it out. Anyway, thanks again for reviewing!
Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 11/03/12 0:31
Chapter: Shades of Lavender: Through the Mist
This was a great great chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far :)
