I think you've captured the voice of an 11-year-old girl in her first week at boarding school perfectly! (I've been one, so I know.) Of course she repeats herself but there are subtle changes depending on who she's writing to, and she talks about what is first and foremost in her mind; it's just like she's scribbling stuff down in a hurry before she's off to the next thing, so it's not going to be a studied critique of her classes. So there! Now write some more!
That was really cute
I'm not sure lily would realisticly be put on the team but it was cute it would be interesting to see what everyone wrote back
It was okay. I understand how Lily is writing to everyone in the family, but she is just repeating the same things. I enjoyed some of it, though. As for Quidditch, it starts in November, not September... And what about all the other classes? You only mentioned Charms, Transfiguration, and History Of Magic. I don't want to put you in a bad mood and I apologize for doing so, but this is what I have to say...(: update soon because I'm nit giving up on you...(:
Author's Response: Finally! Something other than "it was very sweet"! As much as I love compliments, I need to know what I can improve on! Looking back on it now, I realize how repetitive it is. It originally was going to be multiple chapters and go through at least two months, and a lot of loose ends weren't tied up. For example, I knew I wanted her to be Seeker, but being lazy, didn't think about the dates, Paige Taylor was going to have a bigger role, and more classes were going to be mentioned. I'm most likely not updating this story, but I have a few WIPs, so stay tuned! - RavenclawHeadGirl :)
this made me smile. It was very sweet. I greatly enjoyed it.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! :)
Author's Response: Thanks :)
Wow, this is so cool!! Please do more!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I do have several WIP, one of which is a letter fic, but not anytime soon :)
I loved it! I think that you got everything just right! Are you going to write more? I'd read it! Oh, and by the way, you're right, aliens don't wear hats... :)
Author's Response: Thanks sooo much! I do have several works in progress, but no letter fics any time soon :)
Very cute! I always enjoy "letter" stories, it's a fun way to get to know the characters. Planning on writing any more, or just the first week?
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I love reading letter stories too, but writing them is hard! I'm pretty sure I'm only doing Lily's first week but I'm thinking about other letter fics, most likely not next-gen. -RavenclawHeadGirl :)