Wow, Alice - that was really powerful! I know we know the outcome of that night, but not from Voldemort's point of view and it was a good interpretation of what he might have thought at the time. I particularly liked the last part with him and Harry; 'you could have been great' was rather ironic!

I did think, at times, Voldemort's observations were a bit too keen (decoration of their house, neighbours flowers etc.) and perhaps Voldemort's insight into lily's feeling was a touch too astute, but maybe that's just me.

Overall, I think this is very well done - good job :D