My favorite line was that both were baptized by the Phoenix feathers. It makes the wands take on a life of their own, which we know is not impossible since the wand chooses the wizard. Plus, being baptized refers to being cleansed of sin, and since Phoenix tears have healing powers, it works, then, that the wood would be baptized. And then it becomes a battle between good and evil... The yew wand took on countless sins while the holly wand continued to be "baptized" because it strove for what was good. So, what I'm trying to say is that your diction was flawless in this piece, and served to be quite powerful.
Author's Response: THANK YOU! I'm so pleased you commented on this :)
Wow, that is so original. Very, very cool. Rather epic and Tolkien-ish, too. I loved the structure and the formatting, that was great. And I really loved how at the end you are not just talking about trees or wands, but the characters. I always like rhymes, so the rhyming couplets were a great way to punctuate the ending. The word 'tussle' sort of jumped out at me as not quite fitting - it seems too weak a word for the last line, and maybe 'battle' or 'meeting' would work for your intent and convey the same idea? If not, leave it. It's a gorgeous poem and I'm glad to have read it!!
~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the suggestion, Gina! "Battle" does sound a better fit. I am thrilled that you read and liked this, as I know you aren't a huge fan of free-verse. (Although, it does rhyme in the end :D) Thank you for reviewing! <3
