Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 05/27/12 4:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

The way you've written this suggests a silent duel- silent but violent. It was beautiful. I especially like the last line, because it suggests that Voldemort is so arrogant as to think he is the judge of everyone, but we know he is not. Her case may be closed in his eyes, but I believe her case will continue on in the hereafter ( if you would like to believe in an afterlife).

Author's Response: Voldemort is a prick, and he would love murdering powerful wizards and witches personally. UGH. Yes, her case will continue, although I doubt Voldemort will get anywhere near hell or heaven lol.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 03/30/12 10:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

It's only reading now that I've picked up on something. (Actually, it was your summary that gave me the clue - so YAY for summaries!) She's a lawyer. Her trial, the case closed, it all plays so well in these words. Barristers duel; they parry not with swords or wands but with words, and this is gloriously done because whilst I'm getting carried away with the 'words' the deadliness of Voldemort's intent is always there. He's playing with her, enjoying the repartee, and she's a fearsome opponent, but he knows he will best her.

(Mind you in my version Bellatrix kills her - hahhahahah - sorry, mindless self-promotion in a review - such bad form (but you expect no less) )

What I love (and always loved from when I first read it) was the voice of Voldemort. His delivery here is superb. There is a modicum of respect- for, after all, he despatching her himself, and yet he is cruel in his mockery of her pitiful safeguards.

(This magic you spit at the space between us, Its ignorance my skill will henceforth split.)

It is very hard for me to pick out a favourite set of lines because it is all so bloody brilliant, but this made me gasp. the 'spit' particular speaks of his venom and her desperation.

And then .... *clasps hands to face in an attempt to stop jaw dropping totally*

The word 'tryst' *jaw drops* You shoehorn that in, giving a hint of this being a lover's meeting, when clearly this is anything but (although Bellatrix is there *snigger*). But it heightens the tension, and the discomfort here because he is playing with her and getting so much pleasure from this act. *shudder*

I am still collecting my jaw from the ground.

Fabulous ... and lots of other words that I can't think of.

~Croll~

Author's Response: I am thrilled Volders's voice is being appreciated, especially how much enjoyment he's getting out of this. Actually, I do think that if anything ever aroused him, it'd be power. In this case, he certainly is the one having the upper hand!

Thanks for the amazing review, you Golen girl!

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 03/30/12 1:53
Chapter: Chapter 1

Natalie, this is one of those poems that I know is good, but I have no idea why. In fact, I'm not sure if I'm even interpreting it correctly since there are words I don't even know, lol. So I will ask you about it privately in order to not embarrass myself, lol. I do know that your language and imagery is beautiful, though. And that even reading it without quite understanding it, it's powerful. Great job. We shall speak! :)
~Gina :)

Author's Response: This poem was about Lord Vold-to-the-emort coming to murder Amelia Bones :'( I'm happy you found it powerful, because in all honesty and humility, I wanted the poem to showcase the kind of raw and sinister power Volders possesses. Poke me sometime and we can discuss it further :D

Reviewer: Envy_I_May_Be
Date: 03/29/12 12:31
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was beautiful! It was very powerful; your word choice was excellent. I loved the wrath and power that came from the words; it just jumped off the page right at me. I just loved it! It was excellent :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! :)

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