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Reviews For The Cherry Tree

Name: Phoebe Silver (Signed) · Date: 08/19/12 17:13 · For: The Cherry Tree
I really enjoyed it. Well written.

Name: Phoebe Silver (Signed) · Date: 08/19/12 17:13 · For: The Cherry Tree
I really enjoyed it. Well written.

Name: Trucker (Signed) · Date: 04/29/12 3:06 · For: The Cherry Tree
Very cute story, good characterizations, well told. Added you to my favorite authors list.

Name: iLuna17 (Signed) · Date: 04/28/12 16:46 · For: The Cherry Tree
Hi, Gemma Hawk. :)

I really enjoyed this piece. I thought it was original and unique, and was told in a very interesting way. It switched POV’s, which gave both of the characters a chance to say what they’re thinking, and you split it into parts, and each one has such a different tone. It started with Rose picking cherries, indifferent about Scorpius, but by the sixth they’re together. I really liked how you did that. :)

Speaking of cherries, I loved how symbolic the cherry tree was, and the cherries themselves. At the beginning Rose described the perfect cherry, and then the perfect cherry became Scorpius. Brilliant foreshadow. :) The tree also represented more, I think, because it was a meeting place for them, but also a sort of sanctuary, a plcace that was detached from their completely different worlds. And Scorpius’s wasn’t so nice …

I also loved how, though the cherry tree was the main connection between Rose and Scorpius, there was more. They were both destined for Ravenclaw, but both of them did the exact same thing and overruled the hat, but with different houses. Both of their parents fight, although Scorpius’s a bit more severely. I also liked how you made them neighbors, though that may be a tad unlikely considering Draco and Ron’s … history, and difference in social status.

Also, there was something I thought was a little strange. You tend to use capitals during sentences, and while sometimes I thought it added a nice emphasis, other times I was wondering why it was used. Maybe italics might work better?

But, one of my favorite parts of the story had to be how Rose and Scorpius had their own personality, instead of modeling them almost exactly like their parents, as I’ve seen in other fics. I love how Rose was slightly reckless and bold, (she did technically steal the cherries, after all) but also sweet and had that kind of quiet intelligence about her. I thought her reaction to the kiss and her fear of life away form the cherry tree was perfect. All teenagers are scared, and it was almost like a summer romance. When school come around, everything would change. Brilliant job on Rose. :)

I was also very pleasantly surprised by Scorpius’s character. He, too, had a quiet demeanor, but I love how the anger was almost bubbling under the surface. He’s frustrated, but (according to Rose) that never shows at school. For a teenage boy, that, too, hit the nail on the head. I’d never really seen that type of Scorpius before, and love it. He really was the perfect cherry. Sweet, but with a hint of bitterness.

Overall, this was a beautiful piece, very refreshing and unique. Your characters developed brilliantly, and now I suddenly find myself wanting cherries. :) There were a lot of ties that bound them together, which really helped make the story very real for me. Just a beautiful job. It was very three-dimensional and realistic, from the characters to the general feel. Please let me know if you plan on writing any more, even if it’s not Rose/Scorpius.

Keep it up!

Name: Sunny Flyer (Signed) · Date: 04/23/12 1:34 · For: The Cherry Tree
Wow... Really cool…

Name: Aquamarine39 (Signed) · Date: 04/20/12 2:07 · For: The Cherry Tree
That's so cool. The style sort of reminds me of Mary Poppins, like how you capitalized some words, and also like Clarice Bean, and I'm not sure why, perhaps just the way it's written. I really enjoyed it.

Name: Maple_and_PheonixFeather (Signed) · Date: 04/15/12 22:46 · For: The Cherry Tree
Wow! I find myself really loving this fic. The characters, the tone, the flow and the voice all make it a really fantastic read, and I’m glad I stumbled across it.

I love how you introduced the story in a very unique way. Instead of opening with dialogue or some sort of tension, you open with Rose just talking. I found this exceptionally effective because right away, you have given your character a voice that is likeable, and I found myself drawn in by your character, which I think is very important. I love Rose. I love her naivety, her curiosity, and the way she guards her heart. To me, she just feels very teenage girl, which is lovely. She is very easy to connect to, and I think this is one of the reasons that I liked this story so much.

Scorpius intrigued me. I really enjoyed how you portrayed the family dynamic. I don’t think that I’ve ever seen it done quite like this. I loved seeing him as vulnerable. All too often, I think we are shown Scorpius as the strong member of the relationship, but instead, you showed him as vulnerable. I also really liked how made him almost as naive as Rose in terms of relationships. I found it really refreshing.

I loved the gradual progression of the relationship. For me it felt natural and very relatable. The idea that both were beating around the bush, and Rose running was very, very sweet. I loved how they started with a common feeling - fear. I was very easily swept away with the simplicity and the genuine feel to their relationship.

One thing that I think you should really consider is working on the summary. This is such an amazing story in a popular genre, but there is nothing in the summary to really draw the reader in. Giving the reader a slight foretaste into the voice of one of the characters or the emotional feeling of the story could be very beneficial to gaining more readers.

I think the thing that I liked most about this story was the style it was written in. It is very natural flowing, and I really felt connected to the scene and the characters through the way things were described. I loved how Rose slowly started to see Scorpius a bit more, little by little, whether it be his long fingers or his white hair. I found it interesting how you capitalised certain words or phrases in the sentence. I think that this is very effective in giving your characters further voice. I think it really emphasises the important things to them, especially when it comes to each other.


Name: snidget76 (Signed) · Date: 04/10/12 14:44 · For: The Cherry Tree
I that story was very cute. Iliked how the cherries tied the whole thing together and the style it was written in was fun to read. Good work.

Name: GirlWhoCriedWhenSiriusDied (Signed) · Date: 04/09/12 22:55 · For: The Cherry Tree
I really, really loved it. These two are one of my favorite pairings but I find it hard to find a good fic of them because sometimes their characters just seem off. I think you did a fantastic job with the characters and I loved them both. Rose reminded me a bit of Luna, which was a side of her I've never thought of but thoroughly enjoyed. Keep the stories coming - and would it be too much of me to ask for a sequel? I would quite like to see Ron's reaction at having a Malfoy over for dinner. ;)

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