Sweet and short and to the point. Good job!
Author's Response: A belated thank you for the review - I'm glad you enjoyed it! ~Gina :)
I do believe this was the first James/Lily fic that I ever read. I'm happy to say that I instantly fell in love with the entire Marauder Era. Thank you for inspiring my love of the Marauders and Lily. :)
However, I didn't have an account back when I read it the first time. Therefore, I decided that when I did make one, I must come back and review this.
Sometimes it's hard to show the characters' emotions when writing, but you did so perfectly. Their clever banter is fun and amusing, however the second chapter reminds us of more serious issues. I really enjoyed it.
"Where's your better half?"
"I assume you mean Remus and not Sirius."
That sent me into an endless fit of laughter, for some reason. I just found it highly amusing. ;)
Author's Response: Aw, thank you for coming back to review! I'm so glad you even remembered this! I had such fun with it, I'm glad it turned out to be something that hooked you, because I do love writing these characters. I've always enjoyed the clever, fun bits of banter, but the more I write, the more the more serious and bittersweet bits work themselves in as well. Glad you liked those lines - they're true, though, aren't they? ;) Thanks again for all the loverly reviews! ~Gina :)
"Alone? Where's your better half?"
"I assume you mean Remus and not Sirius."
"Maybe I meant Peter."
"Doubt it. But they're all in detention."
"Naturally. And how did you get out of it?"
"I was already in detention when they got in trouble."
Bloody brilliant it is indeed, as Ron would say!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was quite fun. I really appreciate the review! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! ~Gina :)
I really don't know how you pull this off every single time. What amazes me the most is how you get their characters so right, and how we can see their dynamics changing without looking at their faces or knowing what they are doing. It's when Lily calls James James and James calls Lily Lily, and at what moments they do it that we know their real feelings are coming out. And just... GAH! Sorry, I am trying to leave a coherent review because you so deserve here, but I think I am slipping fast into fangirl mode. Such a brilliant way to capture the quintessential J/L! Makes me fall in love with them over and over again.
Thanks for doing this, Gina! :)
Author's Response: Hi Natalie! You are welcome! It's all your fault, of course! I not only took a drabble and expanded it, but added another expanded drabble to it and all of a sudden had a story! A J/L story! Yay! They are forever my OTP. I don't even know why anymore, I just love love love writing them. Thank you so much for your compliments, they make me smile every time I read them. I love being able to get them so right in other people's eyes. The dialogue only thing is fun with them because I can just imagine the way they might talk. I could be totally wrong, but it is such fun. Thank you so much for suggesting this and reading it and leaving such lovely reviews! *hugs* ~Gina :)
Oh my heart. Gina, how do you write them so well??? This is so adorable and yet incredibly sad. It's like reading a losing battle because it's so pleasing to see them together and talking like this but then knowing what's going to happen... OH MY HEART.
Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuu, Julia! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I just love writing them. Yes, it can be a bit sad at times. Bittersweet, really. I don't know why I'm drawn to that, but I am. Thank you so much for reading this and leaving such a lovely review! ~Gina :)
This is great! Fantastic for James's birthday. One question- what did you mean about "it's not actually my birthday", as James said in the first chapter?
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! You know, when I originally wrote the drabble, it had nothing to do with birthdays. So I just threw that in there, thinking it would be like James to make something up to get some attention. But I don't know--maybe it really is his birthday. It was the day I wrote it. I sort of confused myself on that one. Someday I'll figure it out. Thanks again! ~Gina :)
This was a really nice follow-up, and the parallels were a very good idea. It was really sweet that it was an actual date this time, and I think I'm converted!
Author's Response: Yay! Converted to James/Lily or dialogue only as a rather odd but compelling way to write a fic? Either one is good. Thanks so much for coming back to read the second part, I really appreciate the lovely review! ~Gina :)
I have to admit that I wasn’t sure how well the dialogue only thing would work at first, but then I started reading, and I must say you pulled it off really well. I found myself able to infer exactly what Lily and James were thinking and doing throughout. There was no ambiguity, which is quite an achievement. I liked the little pauses in the conversation that you used in Chapter 1 too. It makes the whole thing seems much more natural, although I would have like to see you use that in Chapter 2 as well.
Characterisation wise, I think that you got the nature of their banter just right. They are such different characters, but I can see exactly why they got together in your fic. The way that they alternated between first names and surnames as their levels of annoyance with the other varied amused me. There were a few little phrases that you used that didn’t sound quite in character to me though. For example, Lily uses the phrases “wicked good flyer” and “brilliant in class”, and James refers to “quizzes”, all of which sound a little American to me. On the other hand, James’ cursing did sound very British, so well done there.
I liked the little links between your two chapters, for example mentioning jumping off the tower both times. The changes in mood throughout were effective, with the light-hearted start, angstier second chapter, and that wonderful ending. It made me so happy! I think it is a realistic scenario for how they first got together. I did wonder what had upset Lily in the first chapter though. The story doesn’t need it, and maybe adding the extra detail would have slowed the pace, but I can’t help wondering. Anyway, overall, it was a really sweet, funny little story. The style was well managed, and there isn’t really anything there worth criticising.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review! I'm glad you took a chance on an unusual way of writing a fic around here, and I'm glad it worked for you. Sometimes it doesn't. With these two, it is such fun, though. Like you said, they can have such great banter it's a perfect way to take advantage of it. I tweaked some of the things you mentioned as a bit off, thanks for the suggestions. And yes, I think knowing what they were both really up there for would definitely slow it down. Who knows. They were there and they met and banter ensued, lol. Thanks again for the lovely review, I really appreciate it! I have two more dialogue only fics if you are interested. ;) ~Gina :)
Hahahahahahahahahah. OMP! And again. OH MY PRONGS!
Hee hee - this is so gloriously funny and sweet and heartwarming and and and... ha ha ha. Yes, he is a good date, Lily, so leave him alone. Although I strongly suspect that if she was all sweet and nice to him, then he'd lose interest. Heh heh.
This flows very easily, Gina, and I didn't stumble at all with the lack of dialogue tags.
Happy Birthday, Prongsieeeeeee. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Carole! Glad you enjoyed it! I know you enjoy J/L stories as much as I do so thanks for reading this and leaving such a nice review. And yes, you might be right about her being nice to him--hm, maybe write a fic about it. ;) Thanks again! ~Gina :)
Awwww I love this!!! Natalie put me in a J/L mood last night as well hehe so I'm really glad you posted this. I adore the way you write the J/L dynamic. It feels so genuine. Guhhh I can't stop grinning.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Julia!! J/L moods are fun to indulge so I'm glad you did. And I'm glad you enjoyed it so much to smile. Thank you for the compliments, I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)
That left me smiling! It was really sweet and despite it being all dialogue it wasn't difficult to understand as I could just see them talking (I want to call it bickering but it isn't) in my head.
And James is so cheeky and Lily is bad at making excuses and it all fits so well. He's so sweet to take her to Hogsmeade and show her the Map, even if he gets something out of it.
All that's left now is for me to say how well you capture those two. But (I always manage to add one of these into a review somehow), and not that this is very necessary, I wish I knew what Lily had been contemplating and how (not if) James manages to get it out of her...
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad first of all you were able to follow the dialogue, since I sometimes get reviews saying that's a bit difficult. But I hear it too, and sometimes the other stuff gets in the way when it's just a scene of talking. Yes, James can be cheeky but also caring - and you caught on to Lily making excuses. Really, I can't say for sure what she was upset about, but James was totally right, and I'd like to think she opened up to him in Hogsmeade. Who knows what might happen there. ;) Thank you so much for the review, I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)
Love it. LOVE IT A THOUSAND TIMES! This is why I keep encouraging you to descend further and further into J/L pit, because you get their banter so damn right. -sigh- What an amazing thing to read after the non-stop fanart browsing :D I must say I'm even more in love with James, and J/L will forever be my OTP of OTPs.
Thanks for this treat! And Happy Birthday to James once again!
Author's Response: Thank youuuuuu! Do you think I'll ever hit the bottom and run out of J/L things to write? I sort of hope not. I do love writing them, fun or serious. I'm glad you reminded us it was his birthday, it was fun to see some good fan art! I'm glad you liked how this turned out. I had actually opened it a week or two ago to expand and this gave me the impetus and inspiration to do so, so thanks!! To our OTP *sigh* Thanks!! ~Gina :)