(Signed) · Date:
03/30/12 18:13 · For:
A Very Merry Birthday Celebration
That was a good start. You certainly have a lot of words to use for the word "said." Like 'cooed' and 'crowed' and 'sang.' Was Scorpius in Gryffindor? Were Teddy and James still in school? Wouldn't they be a little old to be in school? Maybe they just came to visit. See you next time.
Author's Response: Thank you! I try to use a lot of synonyms because I know it bothers me when I read something and all it says is "said."
And yeah, I kind of forgot to like, make specifics on that, but yes, Scorpius is in Gryffindor, and Teddy and James were not in school! They just wanted to be at the party.
Thanks for your review! :)