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Name: dreamsnape (Signed) · Date: 11/11/14 12:33 · For: She haunts me in my dreams
I liked this story. You portray Tom accurately, I think, and I believed he could have such feelings for this girl. The ending was good, and made sense for his character, but I felt that it came a bit too soon. I would have liked the story to be longer and more fully developed in the middle.

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I definitely agree that it could've used some development but I wasn't (and still am not really) very good at that kind of thing, and I think most people would prefer concision to unnecessary filler in the middle. Thank you for your review on this old thing though, glad to see it's still being read!

Name: Nagini Riddle (Signed) · Date: 05/24/12 23:04 · For: She haunts me in my dreams
How interesting. I liked the thought process of this story, although it is a little hard to believe that the two students were never found again- where exactly in the Room of Requirement did he put them? Surely Draco or Harry would have found them later, seeing as they had been in the place of Hidden Things. Though, when I think in it, their bodies won't be found because of the cursed fire that was set by Crabbe in the room... How sad... :( but, this story was still well written!!:)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Tom, I assume, hid the bodies reasonably deep in the Room of Hidden Things, and it seems like a pretty big place, so I think if he hid them in a cupboard or under a pile of stuff they would probably not be found again. It is rather sad that their bodies will never be found, but sadness is real and it is inevitable.

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 03/24/12 19:41 · For: She haunts me in my dreams
,br> I did say I'd read and review; it's just taken me a while. Okay, I'll be honest here, this isn't really my type of fic as I generally read/write much lighter stuff and am not into D/A, but I'm glad I took a peek. You have, as the other reviewer said, set yourself a huge task by writing Tom Riddle in first person. I'm not sure I'd have done so, because I find third easier, but it's a VP you seem comfortable in.

Author's Response: Thanks, sorry it's not your type, so even more thanks. I find that my third person writing doesn't come out half as good as my first person, which is probably just another reason why I love getting into the characters' heads! I don't really understand quite what is so challenging in particular about writing Tom in first, but he was, as I said, difficult to balance.I tried to put in a more human side to the hubris and cruelty, yet still have both resonate. Thanks again!

Name: CanisMajor (Signed) · Date: 03/19/12 23:03 · For: She haunts me in my dreams
Hmm ... Tom Riddle, in love, in first-person. Not one to shrink from challenges, are you? But your final scene really makes the whole idea work - it clinches the story, gives Tom a bit of a human side, and (crucially) leaves Tom's overall character looking like it should. A very well-conceived story.

Author's Response: No, I'm definitely not one to shrink from challenges! I'm really glad that this worked, as I found it quite hard to write and was I so worried that it was going to be rejected like my other story was first time. I find it easier to write in first person for some reason, but balancing Tom's character was difficult. It was very helpful to read how others, yourself included, had portrayed him as there is little in the books of his teenage years. Thanks for the review!

Name: PeppermintToads (Signed) · Date: 03/19/12 22:01 · For: She haunts me in my dreams
I found this very interesting and I felt sorry for Tom. This is the second story that I have read about Voldemort being in love as a teenager and having his heartbroken. I enjoy stories like this because they give the reader a bit of insight that they could have never thought of without the help of others.

Author's Response: I felt sorry for him too, and as it's pretty clear he couldn't love as an adult with a mutilated soul, i felt that he should definitely have his share before then. There is a massive shortage of Tom Riddle stories so I think readers really need the insight. History is always written from the winner's point of view, so I think that he can't have been completely bad, just portrayed that way. He was human once, after all. Thanks for the review!

Name: Lost_Robin (Signed) · Date: 03/19/12 18:59 · For: She haunts me in my dreams
I really like this story and thought you did well on the characterization.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story. I'm relieved that you thought that the characterisation was good because it was difficult to get the balance right with Riddle.

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