Reviews For The Findings
Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 03/25/12 7:53
Chapter: Discovery

Despite the fact that I have this aversion to second person because of its propensity to make me feel hectored into feeling things, I really enjoyed this. You have certainly made this piece very evocative and captured Sirius and that night so well. It felt so raw and real as we took that journey through Sirius' mind.

You know, there was a part of me shaking James and begging him not to be dead as well. *sigh*

Great story and beautifully executed. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Yeah second person is iffy, I was on the brink with this one the whole time on whether or not I should stick with it but as you can see, I did, and hopefully it worked. Oh James. . . I swear I could write an over ten page long essay all about a character who isn't even alive during the book he's in. But gah, he gets me emotional. Thanks for reviewing :)

Reviewer: BrokenPromise
Date: 03/24/12 23:42
Chapter: Discovery

Horribly beautiful. I could feel the raw emotion and felt that the scene of destruction gave Sirius' vengeful motives much more power. The characterisation was good, and the whole thing was very realistic. Rounded off with good use of second person, this was haunting.

Author's Response: Oh thank you so much for that lovely review :)

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 03/21/12 1:44
Chapter: Discovery

Oh, that was so sad. Particularly that second to last paragraph, where we get a bit of dialogue. To actually picture and hear Sirius saying that was just heartbreaking. The last paragraph is as well, imagining Sirius straightening up his best friend-so, so sad. Very good writing to create such an emotional visual. Also seems very in character with how I picture Sirius.
The buildup was good as well, although one thing stuck out to me. During the second paragraph, I kept wondering *how* Sirius knew something was wrong with Peter, *why* he knew Peter had betrayed them. A bit more explanation of Sirius's sudden insight might be good in that section, because why use Peter in the first place if it's suddenly so obvious?
I liked it - some great lines that were very emotional. Good final line, too! Nice job!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you! Regarding Sirius and Peter, yes I probably should've put some more there about why he would suspect him immediately, but I just kind of figured that with his best friend being forced to hiding out with his family and knowing that there was a traitor among them, even though I know Sirius suspected Lupin, I don't think he would really trust anyone else at all, with being so close to James and Harry being his godson. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Padfoot Patronus
Date: 03/20/12 22:02
Chapter: Discovery

Repetitive but you don't honestly feel like an honest Sirius fan unless you have atleast the annual read of Halloween 1981 from his POV. So thank you. I particularly liked the ending section where Sirius comes upon James' body. His sorrow is well expressed and has the ability to create emotion in the reader easily. Nice one.

Author's Response: Haha yes I know many fics exist already with this event, but I just couldn't help but do another myself. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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