Hi! I like your choice of suject - I think you've translated the story into poetry and it definitely works well. I really like the altering stanza lengths, it serves to emphasise the repeating pattern of the brothers's stories.
You have rearranged sentences away from how they would normally be written, like 'never this man could Death disarm' but I think because the poem feels like an old fairytale it works well, and actually adds to the feeling of the poem as a retelling of an old legend.
I like the change to the final repeated stanza, however I did wish there was a little more to emphasise that the last brother embraced death, unlike his brothers. It's the main point of the story and I think would just make the ending that little bit more final.
I also wonder if a bit of punctuation would help the piece to flow a bit better. Not having any commas at all makes every line break a break in the poem, even though some of them flow into each other. I couple of times I found myself rereading a couple of lines to get the flow back.
I really like it overall though, this really fits the feel of the old story and I think you've used rhyme and rhythm reall effectively.
Nice! What a great tribute to the Tale of the Three Brothers. :) I especially liked the repeating refrain and how it changed at the very end. :)
I really love the way this poem is written, especially the repeating stanza. That little change in the last one is so simple, but it also sort of makes the whole poem work at the same time.
I also liked the rhythm. It seemed very natural, and even though you had to rearrange your sentences to make them fit, they never lost their meaning or became confusing. It was really well done and quite lovely.
Author's Response: Thanks! This reply is really late, but I still appreciate the review. I'm really glad you liked it! Thanks again for reading and reviewing!