What a unique writing style this story had. I really liked how you started it- it left me wanting to find out what was going on! This is a very nice story tht really captures that no matter how long life is, the next great adventure is awaiting us. :)
Another great story. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Yes! Optimism is the way to go :) Thank you for reading and blessing my May with so much loveliness.
This is one of my favourites of yours for the GH challenge (along with Desire and a Half, and I promise I'll be SPEW-ing that shortly :) ) It reads like the thinking of someone in the very early morning, and half awake and half asleep. There's a wonderful stream of conscious-esque-ness about it, without that breaking your sentence structure/ while being very clear.
The characterisation was wonderful. We know so little about them, and yet I don't see why their situation isn't explored more, as the concepts of eternity and time (your first few paragraphs about maths/ eternal laws were just beautifully thought-provoking and concisely put). The lines about it going to rain were also beautiful. This is a horribly fangirly review, but yes, I love this story, and particularly the subtlety of the ending and the next adventure. It's elegant and dense and beautifully written.
Author's Response: I had a bit of a tough time fitting the events into the same continuous stream of thought and narrative tense. D: But there was no way I was going to allow myself to put italicised flashbacks here. The challenge was a great excuse for me to explore various narrative styles, and in spite of the misses, I'm glad a few worked. This review is gorgeous and makes me feel warm and fuzzy :D Thanks for reading!
Oooooh, Natalie, this was lovely :) What a wonderful pairing to pick in the first place. Nicholas Flamel has always been a character who has fascinated me immensely, and I think you did a wonderful job of fleshing him and Perenelle out in this story, despite its shortness.
I think you explored their characters really well, particularly Perenelle at the beginning. It was a really interesting comparison to use, with numbers, and it's so true as well. (Obviously I would say that -- I am, after all, a maths geek :P)
Finally, I liked how Nicholas was poor and Perenelle was rich, and how they still stayed together despite all that. I think that's what made this story really original, with details like that.
Excellently written, Natalie :)
Author's Response: Nicholas and Perenelle fascinate me too! Actually, eternal life as a concept is a vastly interesting subject. Ha! I'm glad you liked the math-ness. :D And also the characterisation! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Really made my day.
This is pretty damn remarkable. Natalie, this is very good. Sort of sad and strange and intriguing.
I love this story. And it's so obvious, because forever living at the same age for all those many many centuries, must be too much. They have each other, so that is - for the most part - everything. But how wearisome. They only have each other - except for when Dumbledore calls, I suppose.
I'm marvelling at your skill in this story. You spin something that looks so effortless. The richness of the description at the beginning. I forgot I was reading, I'll be honest. It landed me so much in the moment of the story. A clever use of second person. I am pleased, however, that you told the majority of the story in third, although, given your skill, I doubt I would have winced.
This is such a gentle, reflective story, and yet it is very powerful. I love her backstory. I love her spirit. This is lovely, Natalie. Really good.
Author's Response: The second person bit was necessary for the very effect it had on you :D I'm glad you mentioned that and happy it didn't switch you off the fic :) I always thought living forever was a dire thing to do. And while I imagine Nicholas didn't have as much of a problem, Perenelle would find it daunting. Or, that's how I wrote the fic. Thanks for reviewing! <3