I loved how you've really created Bill's work here! I feel like I'm in a Rick Riordan novel (and since I happen to like his books that's a good thing!)
Author's Response: WOW thanks! That's a huge compliment. I'm sure it's not THAT good, but thank you so so so much, even if it's only half true. I hope you like the plot as it goes on...
Hi Kara! This sounds like it will be fun! I think you've done a great job setting up all sorts of little things - the rivalry with Marcus concerning Natasha, the new girl, the new girl and her odd relationship with Mahon, and Marcus's odd behavior (not to mention his back story.) I can feel that all of those things may or may not contribute to a building plot and that's exciting.
I also LOVE how you've fleshed out Bill's job as a curse-breaker. Magiarchaeology sounds awesome! Bill seems very much in character, from the mead to the women, but also a big heart when it comes to Marcus. I already hope nothing bad happens to Bill.
So lovely start, good luck as you continue! :)
Author's Response: Ginaaaaa, yay, thank you! it makes me very happy that other people like the relationship between characters as well. The Curse-Breaker thing... it all just seemed so logical to me, like, of COURSE this is what they do. Maybe in another life, I'll be so lucky... haha Thank you thank you for the review!
OOOOOOOH, plot thickening!
Again your inventiveness and attention to detail in the curse-disabling scene take my breath away. You really know how to write necessary information in an interesting way - well done.
I get a very strong picture of Althea in this story. Actually she looks rather like an Agatha Christie character - ha ha - but then I do watch a lot of Poirot so that could well be why. She's intriguing me, though, and I would love to know what she's up to - if indeed she's up to anything.
Another great chapter - now .... bring on the lovely Natasha :D ~Carole~
Author's Response: I have a very clear picture of her, too, the way she smiles and always looks perfectly polished even in the heat. She does have a bit of an Agatha Christie vibe, I think, because she has the human drama component laid out in this chapter. She's going to get a bit more of a talking role later on... I'm glad that you didn't think I was info-dumping here, because that's always a worry when there is necessary information. Thank youuu for the review!
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Okay, I know I've read this before, but your story really is gorgeous. I plunged straight into it from the first paragraph as I seeped up the atmosphere of the hot desert. Writing description that sets the scene with such clarity and never slips into purple prose is definitely one of your strengths, my love.
I adored the banter between Bill and Marcus. Bill is cocky and sure of himself (and his success with the laydeees) but Marcus gives it back. It came across as very natural and real, plus I'm pretty sure any witch worth their salt would cut the pair of them down to size - heh heh.
Your details here - the Magiarcheologists, for instance - give so much to the story, adding depth and interest. Nice touch with Althea Chubb, by the way.
Your plotting and research are fabulous and this story is glorious :) - reading on ..... NOW ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank youuuu so much for reading/reviewing even though you already know the story! HAH yes, a lot of witches could... though some, like Natasha, just want the same kind of fun themselves *sniggers* I somehow want to write another story about them now with a very strong female lead, hmmm... Thank you, again. I hope the story stays glorious!