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Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/27/12 2:05 · For: Passion
First of all, lovely bit of action for Bill there. ;) I'm wondering if there is more going on than meets the eye, though. And I'm also curious about something - is Marcus okay with Bill going after Natasha? I thought Bill said he wouldn't?
Second of all - yes, the plot has thickened! There's been a few hints, and now someone is ! But...but...where is Marcus?? And that goblin? And who exactly was the old lady telling stories again? I like all your little clues. Very fun!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: As you know - at least I think you do - I cut over 1k words from this chapter. They're still on my hard drive and might make their way online through other channels of publication (coughclickysmutcough) but it just didn't really work in the story. Marcus is happy that they found the treasure, because that means he gets his huge bonus etc., so Bill just assumes that he's fine with it now. And it's not like Marcus was actually doing anything about Natasha, and she approached Bill first, and... well, what is a man to do. Haha -- that's his reasoning, not mine. Thank you for all the reviews :) They totally made my morning.

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/27/12 2:03 · For: Shivers
I think something is going on with Marcus. I'm sort of worried because I already like him. Plus I'm curious what he saw, hmmm.
Would it be neat if there really were magical archaeologists out there? You make it so believable. Great research!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Oooh thanks! I'm glad it's believable. I love archaeology, and I think it works together with magic so well. If I find the time, I'm totally going to write at least one or two more stories about Curse-Breakers. Well, Marcus... The thing is, you really shouldn't just go about touching things in an ancient tomb before you've checked for hidden spells :x

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/27/12 2:00 · For: Success
I loved how you've really created Bill's work here! I feel like I'm in a Rick Riordan novel (and since I happen to like his books that's a good thing!)
Nice buildup...
~Gina :)

Author's Response: WOW thanks! That's a huge compliment. I'm sure it's not THAT good, but thank you so so so much, even if it's only half true. I hope you like the plot as it goes on...

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/26/12 13:11 · For: Quarrels
Hi Kara! This sounds like it will be fun! I think you've done a great job setting up all sorts of little things - the rivalry with Marcus concerning Natasha, the new girl, the new girl and her odd relationship with Mahon, and Marcus's odd behavior (not to mention his back story.) I can feel that all of those things may or may not contribute to a building plot and that's exciting.
I also LOVE how you've fleshed out Bill's job as a curse-breaker. Magiarchaeology sounds awesome! Bill seems very much in character, from the mead to the women, but also a big heart when it comes to Marcus. I already hope nothing bad happens to Bill.
So lovely start, good luck as you continue! :)
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Ginaaaaa, yay, thank you! it makes me very happy that other people like the relationship between characters as well. The Curse-Breaker thing... it all just seemed so logical to me, like, of COURSE this is what they do. Maybe in another life, I'll be so lucky... haha Thank you thank you for the review!

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 02/26/12 8:55 · For: Quarrels
OOOOOOOH, plot thickening!

Again your inventiveness and attention to detail in the curse-disabling scene take my breath away. You really know how to write necessary information in an interesting way - well done.

I get a very strong picture of Althea in this story. Actually she looks rather like an Agatha Christie character - ha ha - but then I do watch a lot of Poirot so that could well be why. She's intriguing me, though, and I would love to know what she's up to - if indeed she's up to anything.

Another great chapter - now .... bring on the lovely Natasha :D ~Carole~

Author's Response: I have a very clear picture of her, too, the way she smiles and always looks perfectly polished even in the heat. She does have a bit of an Agatha Christie vibe, I think, because she has the human drama component laid out in this chapter. She's going to get a bit more of a talking role later on... I'm glad that you didn't think I was info-dumping here, because that's always a worry when there is necessary information. Thank youuu for the review!

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 02/26/12 8:33 · For: Bliss
and who cannot resist the chance to leave a review for this story.

Okay, I know I've read this before, but your story really is gorgeous. I plunged straight into it from the first paragraph as I seeped up the atmosphere of the hot desert. Writing description that sets the scene with such clarity and never slips into purple prose is definitely one of your strengths, my love.

I adored the banter between Bill and Marcus. Bill is cocky and sure of himself (and his success with the laydeees) but Marcus gives it back. It came across as very natural and real, plus I'm pretty sure any witch worth their salt would cut the pair of them down to size - heh heh.

Your details here - the Magiarcheologists, for instance - give so much to the story, adding depth and interest. Nice touch with Althea Chubb, by the way.

Your plotting and research are fabulous and this story is glorious :) - reading on ..... NOW ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank youuuu so much for reading/reviewing even though you already know the story! HAH yes, a lot of witches could... though some, like Natasha, just want the same kind of fun themselves *sniggers* I somehow want to write another story about them now with a very strong female lead, hmmm... Thank you, again. I hope the story stays glorious!

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