Reviewer: baby54boomer
Date: 02/23/12 3:41
Chapter: Chapter 2

Interesting storyline with a variety of possibilities. Might I suggest you keep the tension palatable between Draco and Hermione? Create a multitude of interactions that scream the sexual tension without the act?? Develop "dueling dialogue", imbued with humor and curiosity. As you already pointed out...15 years have passed and our main characters have history to put behind them and discoveries before them. Good luck!

Reviewer: Melina Malfoy
Date: 02/21/12 19:37
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a great start to a promising story!I'll be following along, for sure.
"Since when do you even know what an emotional affair is?!"-LOL!!

Reviewer: SheeranGrint
Date: 02/21/12 19:25
Chapter: Chapter 1

Is great :-) Write more!

Reviewer: Harmthuria
Date: 02/21/12 4:54
Chapter: Chapter 1

I like how you introduced the characters. very realistic. Could you maybe help me out? I haven't been able to get my story validated. I'm losing patience over it to tell you the truth. I don't know what I'm doing wrong. Any help would be appreciated.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I don't have a whole lot of time for Beta work, but I'd be happy to look at one of your chapters and give you some hints, so feel free to send it over. If you're looking for long-term help, I'd suggest checking out the Beta Forums!

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