Your writing is incredible... But now I need to go find something fluffy before I have nightmares. Lol. I'm really enjoying all of your stories though. :)
Author's Response: Wow, I'm glad you like it. My reading *does* tend to be kind of dark, so if you're ever in the mood, read my stories and please review! Thanks for the review!
I love James too! I'm glad you didn't kill him!Great Fic!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! James is something else ... isn't he?
I love all of your work - especially these two. And I know this is a sequel, but is there any chance you'll give this sequel a sequel so we can see if James heals?
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. :)
I have had an idea running through my head about yet another companion piece, but I don't want to overdue it. If I don't, be assured that things will eventually look up for James . . . but it'll be hard. The Cruciatus Curse basically destroyed the nerves in James's legs, so it's highly unlikely he'll be able to walk unaided, or even walk period.
While I mull this over, I have a bunch of other things I'm thinking about posting. :) Thanks again for the review!
Hi Ellie :)
I thought that this story was just wonderfully dark and honestly, it had me guessing all the way to the very end. I had the wonderful privilege of getting to read this story before you submitted it to the archives, and I loved it then and still love it now.
I thought the idea of a “next-generation Voldemort” was really interesting. I definitely think Harry and Ginny’s children (if not Harry and Ginny themselves!) would be the first to be targeted. I also really liked the title, “421 Hours,” because I thought it captured the time that James spent under Ezra’s control very well.
That being said, however, I think that you repeated the title of the story a little too much, especially towards the end. I thought it seemed a little unlikely that a Healer would literally count out the number of hours that James spent under Ezra’s control. Maybe an approximate amount of days, but I think that counting out 421 hours seemed a little bit unneccessary.
I liked that you didn’t sugarcoat anything throughout the entire story. This story had so much torture, pain and violence that I think the action (and plot!) would have been cut down by a lot if you hadn’t included James’s pain. At the same time, I think the torture and violence was a very sensitive topic and had to be handled very carefully, which you did. It was very dark to read, but I think you did a wonderful job of it.
I liked how it was told from first person POV, too. I think if it was told from third person it wouldn’t have been immediate and you wouldn’t have felt like you were truly there.
I loved your characterisation of Harry, Ginny and Lily at the end. Harry was in typical Auror mood, but also was like a worried father, and seemed so glad that James was alive. Ginny was relieved, but also heartbroken to see what James had gone through. Lily seemed just wonderstruck to see her brother again, because I don’t think Harry and Ginny would have told her what really happened to James when he was missing. I think it would have been just too “scary,” for a lack of a better word, for her.
All in all, I thought this was just a wonderful fic. You did a lovely job of characterisation and plot and overall dark/angsty-ness, which I know you love. Thank you for a great read! :)
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for the SPEW review, Lily. :)
I, too, think that the next Voldemort would target the Potters. Certain thins run in families, right? :)
I was really hesitant with submitting this, because, like All That's Left, it's very dark. I didn't want to just, as you say, smooth over the violence, (because that's *not* what would have happened) but again, I'm concerned with the darkness. I'm really glad you liked it, though, and that you think I handled it correctly.
I totally get what you're saying with 421 Hours. I do tend to over-emphasize it, and I'll go back and edit it soon. :) And with the Lily bit . . . she'd be fifteen, and though I don't think they'd tell her everything, she'd know something bad happened. . . seeing the aftermath. And I'm glad you think I did Ginny and Harry well, because for some odd reason I have such a hard time with them. It drives me mad, because I know what they *should* be like, but I'm glad you thought it worked.
Thank you so much for reading this, and I'm glad you still like it. It means a lot when you read my stories first, before I go and change a bunch of things, and I'm really glad you still like it. I promise to go read one of your Cotillion ones soon, twin. :)
Oh. My. Godric. That was spectacular! Like I said on the boards, it was deliciously dark. I loved every second of it; you really had me going! I was so afraid for James, and I thought everyone was dead... Wow. Just wow. Wow!
Author's Response: I love the dark stuff, don't you? Who needs teenage romance when you can have almost every character die?
Hehehe, that actually wasn't that sarcastic. Anyways, thank you so much for the review. I'm glad I manage to convince you of the deaths . . . and I have this to say: did you believe I killed James? I would really be a horrible person if I did, after all I put him through, in All That's Left and this.
Thank you so much. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :)
I thought you'd kill him after he explained about Al's death actually.
Author's Response: Yeah . . . but the fun was just beginning. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Thanks for the review!