This was a good story. I have always loved lupin and like fanfics about his school years. Good job!!
Sigh. *weeps bitterly* I need a hankie!!!!!!!!!
*returns from blowing her nose and wiping her eyes*
Okay, now that I've got a hold of myself...
AWESOME!!!!!! I swear, you are not JKR, but you are Natalie, and you need to give yourself a lot of credit where credit is due. :)
I'd liked to see how you would write Sirius' reaction to the end of school, and also of his friends' deaths, if you haven't already. You have a real knack of capturing emotions in the moment...
Author's Response: I haven't written that yet as so many of my fellow writers have taken on that challenge and done it beautifully. You must check out Gmariam and Equinox Chick. They are fabulous Marauder Era writers!
Oh, this is just heartbreaking and beautiful. There is just something so weighty about Remus, even when things aren't so bleak. *sigh* I really loved the unusual structure of this Natalie. It felt almost more like a poem, but not too much. My favorite part was Remus in the room so still, and the references to the persistence of the sunlight--it's a theme I always go back to in thinking/writing about grief. And the bit you wrote about him wishing for rain... wow, that so put me in mind of that song from Les Mis called "A Little Fall of Rain." Have you heard it? You should listen. It's heartbeat is similar to that of this little story. Lovely.
Author's Response: There is just something so weighty about Remus, even when things aren't so bleak. Exactly why he came to my mind that night when I needed to angst. :( Thank you for the lovely review, Lori. I need to check out "A Little Fall of Rain" now. :)
Beautiful. Simply beautiful.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) <3
That's so, so sad, Natalie! Why so sad! I thought you built through Remus's life really well, ending with such gut-wrenching devastation at the end. The prose and style were lovely. What I liked best, though, were the moments of light-heartedness and even happiness for him--especially that kiss, whomever it was. Lovely. And yet still so sad. I'd like to think that later in life things turned around for him. If you wrote more, what do you think?? Also, did this come to life as a drabble? I'm just nosy. :)
Author's Response: I was in the blackest of moods while I was writing this :/ Usually, ME isn't something I turn to for ff inspiration, but poor Remus was the only one who kept coming up in my head that night. I am happy this was well-received by the flist, though. :) Thanks for reviewing! I don't know if I'll be writing more. Remus always makes me sad lol. Well, so does James, Lily and Sirius.
Author's Response: I was in the blackest of moods while I was writing this :/ Usually, ME isn't something I turn to for ff inspiration, but poor Remus was the only one who kept coming up in my head that night. I am happy this was well-received by the flist, though. :) Thanks for reviewing! I don't know if I'll be writing more. Remus always makes me sad lol. Well, so do James, Lily and Sirius.
That was so beautifully sad. I think fear for the future and growing up is such a universal feeling, and you captured it so well here. I loved your characterisation of Remus, and the Marauders--it felt very realistic, and in such a short piece as well! This story relied on the fact that everyone reading it knows exactly what happens to each of these characters, and you make use of that so well. The scene when Remus is reading his life-line and thinking about it, and what they make of it, is particularly heart-breaking. I liked the way he's neither completely right, but nor is he completely wrong, and the difference between what he fears, and the reality is so sad.
However, I would say the ending threw me off slightly. Having centred your italicised sub-titles thus far, even though the dates you have are different to the emotions you describe before, it just messes up the look of the thing. That's very shallow, isn't it? Feel free to ignore me. I honestly loved this story and am favouriting it right away. Alex
Author's Response: I originally had the last two titles centered, but somehow it didn't go with the five preceding ones :/ Ideally, I'd have them right and left aligned, but the archives don't allow right alignment. -sigh- This is a lovely review, Alex. Thank you so much!
Stunning. Sad. Incredibly moving.
My favourite part is ... um ... I don;t know. It's all very good. The lifeline on the palm makes me cry a little I'm not sure what else to say, except that this sounds so raw and real.
Author's Response: :( Thanks for reviewing! Yeah, I wrote this while I was in a black mood.