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Name: Ginny Weasley Potter
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07/15/13 15:42 · For:
I got to this story because it was recommended in the romance class on the forums, and I am glad I did, because I really enjoyed this. It felt different to me right from the beginning, and progressed to a well-plotted, well-spun tale.
The first thing that struck me about your story was the writing style. It is elegant, just like the story -- just like the setting, in fact. Your narrative is smooth and it flows well with the scenery you’ve given us here. It really set my mood the way you wanted it to be -- relaxed. I was at ease, and I had a vivid mental picture of everything that was going on. Speaking of which, I love how you wrote a detailed description of what the wedding was like, because it really gave me an insight into Audrey’s personality.
I quite liked how the story was from Charlie’s perspective. I wondered why he never got married, and getting into his head was really nice. I agree with the way you’ve written his thoughts -- he simply didn’t feel the need to settle, perhaps. But then, the summary mentioned Daphne Greengrass, and I was intrigued. I really wanted to know how that would work out.
As I read further, I quite liked how Charlie and Daphne got acquainted. I could see that Charlie was quite the smooth talker, and I enjoyed the conversation between him and Daphne. I couldn’t believe how friendly Daphne seemed at first, but I waved it off as Charlie being charming. Of course, we find out the reason for that much, much later. But the way things progressed between Charlie was extremely well written and believable. The sexual tension and mild sexual overtones were well expressed. I could see that Daphne really interested Charlie, and the transformation in his mind from wanting to be single, and then suddenly liking the idea of companionship was well done.
I wish Charlie had worked on his intuition about Daphne just wanting some scoop on him. But then his attraction overrode that, and I can understand. I absolutely loved that Charlie forgot to get back to George because he was trying to pursue Daphne. It really made me laugh, and then harder when George discovered the two of them.
I loved the characterisation in this story. Audrey is different from all the versions I’ve read of her. I never imagined she could be a rich woman with an estate with taste in everything royal, but I can imagine Percy marrying such a woman. And then there was Charlie -- and I think he was written very well -- smooth and engaging. George was spot on. I enjoyed all his dialogues, especially this one. "Yeah, we haven't told anyone yet, though. The little Snitch is due this autumn." And I think George’s ‘new father’ grin was absolutely adorable. I know how hard he can be to write, so really, great job! And then, there’s Daphne. I liked the mystery she exuded, and the fact that she was so Slytherin. She turned out to be intelligent and manipulative in the end, and it for the image you had created of her.
The end really saddened me. I was really hoping that this was it for Charlie, but apparently not. I hope she does go to visit him in Romania, though. A sequel, perhaps?
I really, truly enjoyed this story, and again, I’m so glad I decided to read it. It was a wonderful experience. Good luck with the Cotillion, and hope this review motivates you to write some more Harry Potter stuff! :)
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03/07/12 18:10 · For:
Ginaaaaaaaaaa, this was lovely :) Charlie is a gorgeous character, and I think you did a great job characterising him in this.
I think it's interesting that JKR said how Charlie didn't marry (or something like that) and I think you built on that really well. And I was a bit miffed at Daphne for bailing on him like that. That was a bit... meh. (To her, not you :))
Anyway, I'm not really very coherent atm, so I'll go away now, lol. Well done!
Author's Response: A very belated thank you, Soraya! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Charlie was was great character to write so I'm glad he turned out all right. I have more plans for him. And yes, Daphne was a bit of a you-know-what there at the end. I toyed with that but had to go with it since I have other plans, heh heh. Thanks again for the lovely review! ~Gina :)
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02/09/12 15:59 · For:
Aw, poor Charlie. :) And he's such a charmer here, to not get the girl. Then again, not sure he really needs one, you know? I usually want a happy ending, but this wasn't so much UNhappy either. She got what she wanted and he went on with the life he likes. It's all good.
Lovely writing, Gina. I particularly liked the George/Charlie relationship here. It's not one that its often explored, and you gave it a nice spin. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, Lori! I know what you mean about Charlie. I think he's gained the reputation in fanon that he is what he is and happy to be on his own. Maybe it was one too many heartbreaks, who knows. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for reading! ~Gina :)
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02/07/12 4:33 · For:
D: That broke my heart a little bit D: But also, it made me happy because goddamn Daphne is taking charge of her own life and didn't need a man to show her how to live it in the first place. :D I love your Charlie, btw, and his fluid sexuality. *drools* Lovely work!
Name: Equinox Chick
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Natalie! I really appreciate the review and your comments. I suppose you could look at Daphne that way but I still sort of feel bad for Charlie for being played like that. But who knows, maybe Daphne hated doing it but had to. And yes, Charlie is fluid in my book. I have plans for him that do not include Daphne Greengrass whatsoever. I might have even come up with a title this past week. hee hee. Thanks again! ~Gina :)
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02/06/12 18:30 · For:
I LOVED IT!!! Awwwwww, I really enjoyed this story, Gina (despite the FALL),. It's lovely to see a Post Hogwarts story featuring Charlie because he's so lovely and deserves to be written about more. Obviously he's actually with Penelope (Percy's ex - ha ha), but I can forgive you that - hee hee.
Seriously I did enjoy reading this. there was a moment whenh I thought Daphne had given up her secret a little fast but you actually explained that PERFECTLY with the lines that she recognised in Charlie something that she wanted, and of course confessing all to a stranger is so much easier than to a friend/family member.
The other thing I really enjoyed was that this was a Charlie and George banter type story, with none of the Trio - yayayay! Ha ha - I just like to read stories without them barging in.
The end was good. George's prank wa sperfect (lovely to see him happy and not moping).
Then because I was squeeing so much, I realised I hadn;t read the end properlyyyy. Noooooo, Daphne, you stitched him up. But he's happy and she won;t fool him again. I LOVED the last line, and now please introduce me to Charlie. I want to make him mine.
Author's Response: Once again this review makes me smile. A very belated thank you for this, Carole. I really appreciate all your comments. I'm glad it turned out and had it's moments, esp. George. I have to admit, it was nice to write about a minor character (and not a Marauder for once, lol) and not have the trio turn up. The end is a bit rough on Charlie but I have other plans for him. Sorry, they don't include Penelope. So maybe someday I'll give him a go again. Thanks again for the lovely review!! ~Gina :)