Reviews For Neither Can Live
Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 07/01/12 5:04
Chapter: Possession.

My favorite line had to be the first line- the sky bleeds tears of glass... The image makes me shudder! And it's totally not cliche, so original! I'm always happy to see when authors are able to break from normal phrases!
It was a beautiful poem that held me spellbound from that first line! You had such beautiful diction and prose, it made me a little jealous! :) short poems are fun to read, although I personally love to write long poems. I think you can tell when you read my poems on this website, plus on the Poetry Anyone forum!
Anyways, this isn't much of a critique or a review... So I'll just say that I thoroughly enjoyed this piece! I'm glad you were able to get it put back in the site!

~Nagini Riddle

Author's Response: Thank you! Wow what a lovely series of reviews :) It was such a nice surprise to see them waiting for me.

Reviewer: Padfoot11333
Date: 03/28/12 19:56
Chapter: Possession.

Hi there, Julia!


This poem was beautiful. I’m not the type of reviewer who admits that they were brought to tears, because usually I’m not, but this did leave me a little dumbstruck. I love the imagery created by the words you used. I felt like they really fit.


I really loved how you wrote the song based off of a piece in the Harry Potter score. As someone who often listens to or plays music and also writes poetry, I can definitely see how the two are connected. Even though there are no specific words, you can still create a specific mood from the music made. I think what I like about this poem is that you took the mood created from the music and put it into words. Yet even though this transition, you still managed to keep the feeling the composer meant to portray.


I must admit, the first time I read this, I wasn’t sure whether it was talking about Harry or Voldemort. Now, I think (and please correct me if I’m wrong) that it’s definitely talking about Harry. I say this not because of the words used (although that played a part in it) but because of the tone showed throughout the poem. While Voldemort’s side of the war wouldn’t have been sunshine and roses, I think the people who were on Harry’s side would definitely have had a darker path. Everything that they used to have would be ruined, while the Death Eaters rose to the top, and I think you really accentuated that here.


I did feel like the last line was a little bit…off. The rest of the poem had this beautiful imagery, and it was describing all this awful stuff that was happening. I kind of feel like you just added the last line to give it a little bit more of a Potter connection, and as a last line, I expected it to hold something to think about: a thought-provoker, if you will. While this held a closure that definitely left me thinking about the poem after I read it, it didn’t leave anything in itself for me to think about, and I think that’s what makes a good last line…a great last line.


I love the imagery used in the first two lines especially. I’m doing a poetry unit in English class recently, and one of the things we’ve been learning about is personification…how you have to be careful to use it but not overdo the metaphor you’re trying to create. When I first read the line “The sky bleeds tears of glass,” I felt like you were simply trying to say how gloomy and dangerous it was during HBP, but when you segued into the next line and spoke about how skin and life were being torn, that was just amazing.


The next three lines, after the ones I just discussed, were really interesting in themselves. Since the book is told from Harry’s point of view, we never really know how the rest of the wizarding world really sees him, just how he sees himself. But in these lines I think you emphasised that everyone thought he was this wonderful, brave, powerful man. How, as you put it, “nothing but his purpose strengthens him.” I felt like this was just a little ironic, since through most of DH Harry isn’t sure what his purpose is.


I also thought the free verse style worked very well. In my opinion, it really emphasized what you were trying to say with this poem when the form was unscripted, rather than having a set rhyme or rhythm scheme.


Overall, Julia, this was a fabulous piece of poetry. The way you can take simple words and turn them into something so beautiful is beyond me. You definitely deserve the featured author position in SPEW. This may sound redundant, but I hope you continue to write poetry for a long time.


Lily xxx

Author's Response: Sorry for taking so long to reply, Lily! I always find it hard to response to wonderful SPEW reviews because they leave me rather speechless :) Thank you for this lovely review. The focus of this poem could be interpreted as being more on Harry but it's hard to single him out because it really is about the connection between them. I wanted to keep it ambiguous, keep the lines blurred, keep shifting between one or the other until it wasn't clear who I was writing about. It's interesting that you didn't like the final line. I do like it and will keep it because I feel it punctuates the true meaning behind the poem i.e. the connection between Voldemort and Harry while leaving it open. I'm sorry it didn't work for you, though, and thanks for sharing your thoughts. I do really appreciate it.

Again, thank you so much for this review, Lily. I loved reading your thoughts and interpretation.

Reviewer: Envy_I_May_Be
Date: 02/21/12 17:13
Chapter: Possession.

Oh my goodness. That was supremely powerful. It was short, but that's part of what packs the punch. That was gorgeous and stunning. Loved it!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 02/06/12 8:06
Chapter: Possession.

As a fellow sufferer of AD (I think we need a support group), then of course I shall review you. That and I don;t think I did the first time, and I should have done because this is a wonderful poem.

Forgive the squeee, but 'GAHHHHH' I love your poetry so much. You really do have this extraordinary way with words that create fantastic images.

A necrotic cantata of joyous evil, Within the bounds of immortality Just amazing.

It was hard to choose a line/lines to quote here because they're all so good, but that set just awed me. The whole poem just sums up Harry's life and sacrifice so much. Yes, we know he survived, but he didn't know he would. He was certain he was walking to his death, and that still gets to me, every single time. *sigh*

Your poetry always seems to encapsulate feelins and moments so brilliantly. Thank you for sharing. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Carole. Harry's sacrifice seems to be basis for a lot of my poetry. There is just something about what he went through that gets to me every time and I have to write about it. Sigh. Yes, we really do need a support group!

Reviewer: hestiajones
Date: 02/06/12 7:17
Chapter: Possession.

:'(

This is so bloody fabulous, Julia. First of all, I love the visuals it gives me: tears of glass cutting skin and tearing life, extinguished with one tongue-flick. Gahh. The entire poem is like word porn. I cannot get enough of it.

As for the emotions it evoked in me. Once more, it managed to remind me of Harry's sacrifice, his need to sacrifice, and the great fear, loneliness and vulnerability he felt after he realised he had meant to die after all. The last two lines, however, makes me think of the strange parallel between him and Voldemort, and how different they were from each other at the same time.

I hope it receives as much love as it did the first time, if not more. It deserves nothing less!

Author's Response: Oh you have me giggling right now :3 Word porn. Thank you so much for the lovely review, Lafonna.

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