Reviewer: juniper
Date: 04/02/12 19:34
Chapter: The Witch's Lullaby

How mean of Ms. Grimm.
And the fact is, Claudia was cold to Alex - even if Alex was mothered well, it's not like the real thing. And she kept it a major secret. Alex's reaction is typical of adopted children. Lilith really needs some psychological training.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 04/02/12 19:21
Chapter: Hags

My favorite part was when the boys were looking through those magical eyes and David saw Dylan get very old but Alex hardly aged. There is something strange going on with the hags and the man with the long hair. This was a great chapter. Can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: juniper
Date: 04/01/12 17:12
Chapter: The Stone Hogan

Great writing.

Reviewer: juniper
Date: 04/01/12 17:11
Chapter: Witches' Rock

Great writing.

Reviewer: juniper
Date: 04/01/12 17:09
Chapter: The Bones of Their Victims

I love how she apologizes to Charlie. First time it sounded sincere to me! (Sorry charlie is a common expression)

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/28/12 22:20
Chapter: Wandless

I think I'm a bigger baby than Alexandra. I would've taken all the pain medication I could get. I wonder if Alex saw Brian at all the rest of the summer. It seemed like they might've been friends again. This is so good already that every time I sit down to read I want to keep reading. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/27/12 20:51
Chapter: Not Clever Enough

I really shouldn't take a break and read at work. Now I want to keep reading and I have other things to do. I wonder why Brian came after Alexandra. I noticed he called her his friend. Too bad about the splinching but I'm sure Alex learned something. I've always had this bad feeling about Diana Grimm. I smiled to find out that the Trace was keeping people informed of what Alex was doing. I think she's determined to be a 'bright' witch. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/26/12 21:10
Chapter: Daughter of Thorn

I think the quiet, disappointed attitude is more effective in discipline than yelling at someone. I'm starting to wonder too, why Abraham Thorn was interested in a Muggle woman like Alexandra's mother. Great chapter and I can't wait to get deeper into this story.

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 03/26/12 19:44
Chapter: Witches' Rock

holy moley what a action packed chapter, and the next one she fights John can't wait

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/23/12 18:09
Chapter: The Stone Hogan

Clever chapter. In retrospect I should have figured what was going on.

I don't know how strong the Stone Hogan is, but if the door can be kept close, Alex may have foiled John's plan. Now if only the calvery will arrive in time.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/23/12 17:50
Chapter: A Gathering of Witches

Both Alex and Totsie are very defensive against each other, both ready to criticize each other, both unlikely to apologize for mistakes he or she may have made. Part of it is because Alex mistrusts adults, and Tsotsie mistrusts Colonials. I get an impression that Totsie is a decent person, but doesn't like interference or fools both which he thinks are personified by Alex.

I wonder if Totsie's definition of bewitched is the same as the Imperious Curse.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/19/12 22:11
Chapter: Ghosts of Roanoke

I sure didn't expect Diana Grimm to show up there. While I didn't want Abraham to kill her, for a brief moment I thought that it would be nice to have her out of the way. Alexandra is so cute. She's such a tomboy. It's like Payton is maturing faster than Alex. Great chapter.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/19/12 17:47
Chapter: Nemesis

Glad she didn't meet John. What makes her think she could stop John when Larry can still beat her up.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/19/12 17:24
Chapter: Runaway

I was kinda hoping that it would occur to Lilith that Alex would try to run away. The portrait could have told her that she snuck alot of food out of the cafeteria and could have posted a guard near the invisible bridge. Does it not occur to Lilith that Alex would try to hitchhike?

It occurred to me that Alex didn't use magic until she was accosted in Farwell New Mexico, so that the trace couldn't be used until then. Perhaps I watch too many NCIS episodes where McGee can trace anything cell phone related, but it would have been interesting if they contacted Archie and had him back trace Alex base on her cell phone usage.

Reviewer: juniper
Date: 03/19/12 14:26
Chapter: Nemesis

Great job!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/12/12 18:35
Chapter: Lies My Mother Told Me

I am glad that we know who Alex's mother is. Like Alex, I suspected it may have been Lilith. I ruled out Diana because I couldn't see Abraham kill Diana before Alex's eyes even if she didn't know that. Yet it seemed reasonable that Diana would be angry that Abraham got her sister pregnant.

Lilith's anger at Alex in book 1 makes sense in that she didn't want to lie to Alex and knew Alex would be angry when she found out and Lilith feels guilty about it. Also as I noted before Alex does listen to Lilith and seems to take her messages to heart. Of course by this logic, Snape would have been Harry's father, but still there is a connection.

What is confusing is the spell that disabled Hecate. Normally when a person loses their short term memory, they can remember everything up to a certain point. Yet you have her not only forgetting the recent past but everything. If Hecate couldn't remember everything then she would be a very stupid cat. Yet this isn't how Galen acts.

My guess is that all her memories are in cat brain cells but do not tranform into human brain cells. Therefore Galen can be a cat with human memories, but not human. The other possibility is that Hecate is similar to victims of the Cruciatius Curse (I see parallel between her and the Longbottoms) or that a dementer got half her soul or something.

Reviewer: juniper
Date: 03/09/12 19:55
Chapter: Lies My Mother Told Me

I really don't like the cat idea. sorry.

Otherwise, great work as usual

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 03/09/12 18:18
Chapter: Lies My Mother Told Me

OMG i can't believe the grimms are her aunts what an amazing chapter, can't wait for the next one to see where she goes.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/06/12 20:44
Chapter: And I Will Treat With Any Power

I hope "Chinatown" isn't one of your favorite stories. This is a terrible cliffhanger, made bearable only because I know the story is finished.

When I read there were owls that flew in front of the driver's car, I wondered if the intended victim was supposed to be Alex. So I wasn't too surprised when Livia showed up.

I am sure Alex should be listening to Quimley, when he said she shouldn't be making promises.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/06/12 20:29
Chapter: This is Going to Suck

I actually thought the wand might be in the bank account somewhere. Obviously very reminiscent of Harry finding the Gryffindor sword complete with partner who although he doesn't rescue her, probably would have saved her if the pond was deeper.

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