Reviewer: juniper
Date: 02/21/12 1:25
Chapter: Witch's Sight

Keep it up

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 02/21/12 0:53
Chapter: The Alexandra Committee

I like the name of the committee.

I suppose we won't know until the end of the book whether we can trust Dean Grimm. Although telling Dean Grimm about this wouldn't do what Anna wants, even if she is fundamentally against the Deathly Regiment. (Assuming she knows of its existance). She would say it's too dangerous (and she's correct) but this isn't what Alex wants to hear and we all know Alex isn't going to wait for adults to help her.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 02/21/12 0:35
Chapter: A Murder of Crows

I think Alex was correct in doing what she did. At the very least I don't think Shirtliffe should have yelled at her. I'm glad Dean Grimm is more upfront with Alex at least acknowledging someone is trying to kill her. I am also surprised Alex is telling her friends.

Reviewer: Jander Fili
Date: 02/20/12 21:24
Chapter: Witch's Sight

Hello Inverarity! This is a fantastic chapter. I love how Alexandra's emotional state is still very juvenile, yet her ability to critically think is highly developed for her age, likely due to the heavy tasks she has carried out so far. Keep up the good work!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 02/20/12 16:18
Chapter: Hags

I thought David would tell off the proprieter of the Astronomy tower for kicking them out. I think he was distracted by what he saw in the eyeball.

I find it hilarious that Dylan thinks Constance and Forbearance are hot! I remember how proud they were about getting them to dance last year. What is especially amusing is that Constance and Forbearance don't have a clue that they are pretty.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 02/19/12 14:46
Chapter: Wandless

One thing that annoys me about Diana is how she threatened to Obliviate Brian if Alex is caught Apparating again. One has to ask what is so wrong about Apparating. I think Diane is making the same mistake Lilith did in book 1. She is not telling Alex the full truth.

I think however Lilith did mention something important in the last book when she said 'the pressure to expel you is greater than ever before.' Who wants to expel Alex? Is it Hucksteen? Darla's father? her uncle the Congressman? Some other member of the Elect?

Diana confirms it when she tells Alex that bringing her to a wizard hospital would raise awkward questions. Would Apparating without a license be grounds for expulsion? Not for normal people but maybe for someone who has twice visited the Lands Below and returned intact.

I suppose it's possible that if Diana gives Alex too much information, Alex will do something stupid and get into further trouble. But then again, if Alex thinks something is being hidden from her, she will get into more trouble.

I suppose someone in the wizarding justice department wants to give Alex Veritaserum. I wonder if this means Diana isn't telling her superiors what Alex told her about the Lands Below and that if Alex was forced to tell what had happened Diana would be out of a job.

I note that Diana denied Obliviating Alex's mom in spite of the note that was in the registrar (that Alex saw in book 1). Makes me wonder if her mom was Obliviated or not.

I also find it interesting that there is another mysterious and unnamed sister and Alex is the 8th child.

Author's Response: Many questions, aren't there? You'll get answers to some before the end of the book. Thanks for the reviews!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 02/18/12 14:25
Chapter: Not Clever Enough

Alex is taking someone's advice (studying) without doing something stupid. We should note time and place.

Since last Christmas when Brian appeared apologetic, I was hoping for a reconciliation between Brian and Alex. Brian fighting Billy shows actions instead of words.

Bonnies actions are mirroring Darla's.

Too good to be true. Alex is trying to Apparate. Of course she only succeeds when she wants to escape from Brian. If she weren't so panicky about seeing Brian none of this would have happened.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 02/18/12 0:53
Chapter: Daughter of Thorn

I may be reading more into this chapter, but it seems to me Thalia is overreacting. Both Julia and Alex are witches. Julia is 16, the same age Max was when he went into the woods alone. Furthermore they took a house-elf with them. Thalia knows ghosts don't cause ghost sickness.

I will grant going out in the middle of the night might border on rude, but I should think that Thalia when she was young also did impulsive things. That coupled with the fact that it is unlikely that Diana Apparated across the ocean. Makes me wonder where Diana Apparated to?

I have this suspicion that Thalia has betrayed Abraham mainly because of the death of her son.

I note that Absalom leaves a clue as to why it was necessary although he doesn't explain what the consequences are of stopping the sacrifice. It would be most annoying if the worst of it were that there would be no trains running through the Lands Below. (If Abraham Thorn truly opposed the Deathly Regiment, then I'm assuming all these attacks on Gringotts and the New Amsterdam school are about living without the benefits of the 7 year sacrifice.)

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 02/17/12 14:27
Chapter: Ghosts of Roanoke

Just want to thank-you for writing these stories. You write incredible stories that are a pleasure to read again and again. They are like JKR in that when they are reread new clues appear that tie in alot things. Last year or the year before I introduced my college age son to your stories. He's been a fan eversince 2nd grade when the Sorcerer's Stone was read in school. Although he doesn't not write reviews he looks forward to his Harry Potter fix between classes.

I just noticed that to WODAMND Act now allows Obliviating Muggles. How paranoid are they? It implies Muggles can do something if they all got together.

Just as Abraham Thorn stopped time for Alex, I wonder if he also stopped time for Julia.

Reviewer: juniper
Date: 02/13/12 13:10
Chapter: Beneath the Stars Above

innocence scares me for some reason!

Author's Response: She can be pretty scary sometimes... ;)

Reviewer: juniper
Date: 02/10/12 14:54
Chapter: A Determined Elf

Very interesting! Nice to see some plot development!

Reviewer: Abundjah Yedesh
Date: 01/22/12 22:36
Chapter: The Alexandra Committee

This chapter is a masterpiece. I haven't liked all the chapters as much as this, but this one is really great. I think I'm going back to the beginning of the first book, reread it all, and submit reviews of what I like greatly and what not so much.

Author's Response: Thanks very much, I am glad you have enjoyed the books. And I do like concrit.

Reviewer: Ariana_Fosse
Date: 01/17/12 21:34
Chapter: Ghosts of Roanoke

I have really enjoyed reading all of Alex's adventures. I think you have characterised her very well ,but I would like to be able to tell her to stop being an idiot at times. Thanyou very much.

Reviewer: Jander Fili
Date: 01/17/12 2:50
Chapter: Ghosts of Roanoke

Hello Inverarity! I'm so excited to read new AQ material! The first few chapters are excellent, as always, and I'm eagerly awaiting the next one.

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 01/16/12 20:27
Chapter: A Murder of Crows

man what a close call for Alex, i can't believe she's going to tell them, i bet she's only going to tell them part of the truth.

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 01/13/12 19:55
Chapter: Hags

man i hope she tells them, great chapter

Reviewer: juniper
Date: 01/13/12 13:58
Chapter: Hags

Nothing much seemed to happen in this chapter. Well, at least it's not a cliffhanger.
So she saw Manuelito, and this confirms that she's really going to die in the next seven years. I figured that would have to be the big change from HP.

Reviewer: juniper
Date: 01/10/12 17:46
Chapter: Wandless

Now I have to wait until Friday?!!

Reviewer: juniper
Date: 01/07/12 23:52
Chapter: Not Clever Enough

I love the characterization. Poor Julia.

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 01/06/12 21:52
Chapter: Not Clever Enough

Alex really is a foolish foolish girl, great chapter though. excited to see how it goes with her sister.

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