Reviews For After The Storm
Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 10/27/13 5:17
Chapter: The Ties That Bind

Oh, this is great. And it’s rotten that it has so few reviews because I think you’ve caught a certain moment in Andromeda’s life quite beautifully. When she left the Black household to marry Ted, it was obviously a huge event, so what I love here is the shift of her perspective and how it’s not just down to knowing Ted. The murder of a witch she barely knew plays on her mind, and then seeing ted in the street just brings that all back to her. there’s no drama, there’s no huge act of rebellion, but there is a small one, and that makes perfect sense. I’ve always felt that Sirius’s rebellion would have been a huge thing, but also one that could have been foretold, but Andromeda’s probably hit the Blacks out of the blue. And perhaps that hurt them all the more. Maybe that’s the reason Bellatrix was so determined to kill her niece.

Anyway, back to the story. I wasn’t sure about the present tense, at first. It can come across as forced, as if we have to be aware that the events are unfolding as we read, but as I got into the story, I forgot any quibbles I had because the story flowed well.

One of the things I particularly liked in the story was your characterisation. It’s very easy to go over the top with Death Eaters, their supporters and their opponents. However, you reined back on the melodrama. At the point of confrontation, only the Lestranges were quick to react, and whilst some people might have written Bellatrix as the one who would hex Ted, this portrayal was much better because she stopped any fight, and thus showed how powerful she is. I liked Ted a lot as well. He would have stood up for himself, we know that, but he was also wise enough to know that he couldn’t have taken them all on. Andromeda’s appreciation of Ted was lovely to read, this slow realisation that had started in Potions, and seemed to meld into more than mere like but into something that could lead to love, was beautifully written.

One small pick:

You’re different that I thought you’d be, you know, he said.

I think you mean ‘than’ rather than ‘that’, and because it is a pivotal line in their relationship, it is one you should look at rewording. Other than that, I very much enjoyed this. Well done. ~Carole~

Reviewer: LoonyLupin
Date: 12/28/11 16:15
Chapter: The Ties That Bind

I love Andromeda because she makes the right choice, all because of Ted :) Great writing!

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