Reviews For A Black Christmas
Reviewer: Maple_and_PheonixFeather
Date: 12/15/12 23:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hello,

This is a very cute piece that is definitely very festive and fun to read. It nicely contrasts the happy things and slightly irksome things of Christmas, all while keeping it lighthearted.

I really liked how you characterised Sirius. What I thought was especially nice about it was that Sirius doesn’t really seem angry. I think that a common fandom characterisation is that he is constantly angry and raging at his family. Instead, here you have him more fed up. It’s more like he finds his family’s antics bothersome and he seems just tired of being the one left out all the time. I liked how you made his sense of humour clever. His practical jokes aren’t mindless, they are cleverly thought out and expressed. Lastly, I loved this line: “Andromeda, my dear, there are four somethings in your mansion which disagree with me, and they disagree with me about everything.” I thought it was just a lovely contrast to the sort of boring atmosphere you have created, and there was something just so Sirius about it.

I really liked the clever names that you have given the ‘outcasts’ of the group. I love the name “Andy” “ it seems to defy the Black tradition in that it is very common and Muggle sounding, but also in that it is a dual gender name, when all of the family’s names are very gender specific and very old school. I also like how Alpheus was shortened to “Alph”. There is just something so ridiculous about that name “ it’s fun and it takes the Latin out of the name, defying the family in a small way.

Lastly, the prank was very well thought out. It wasn’t something so ridiculous and destructive so that it harmed someone, rather, it was just a small sort of rebellion against the family in a way that harms no one and is really quite clever. I think that this really shows how witty Sirius is “ it’s quick, it’s easy, it’s rebellious, but it doesn’t hurt anyone. It’s very nicely done and made me smile, which is always a good thing.

Overall, nicely done and very cute. It has a very festive feel to it without it being overly cheerful or blatantly Christmasy. Great job.

Maple

Reviewer: LoonyLupin
Date: 12/29/11 20:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

I love Sirius and Andromeda. Since she's not mentioned much in the books (we only meet her once!), I didn't realize how close she would be with her cousin. You wrote such a great story, and around a great time of year, too :)

Reviewer: iruthb
Date: 12/26/11 9:49
Chapter: Chapter 1

It's beautiful; the detail, the characterisations of the characters, the prank. I sat there giggling throughout.

I love Andromeda's nickname. It suits how she is different from the other Blacks, as it's a nickname they wouldn't approve of.

You have a beautiful, poetic way of writing.

Merry Christmas!

Author's Response: Oh Immo - I'm so glad you liked it, I was really worried it was too dark for Christmas! But if it made you giggle it can't have been that bad. I regret not sending it to a beta though (my two old foes, typos and extremely long sentences, struck again!). I can't take credit for Andromeda's nickname - it's one of those things that I've read and liked in so many fanfics that it blends into pretty much being canon for me! Anyway, thanks for the happy review, that's a massive relief - and merry Christmas to you too, and a happy New Year! Xx Phia

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