Reviews For Merry-Go-Round
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 03/22/12 21:12
Chapter: Ghosts and Memories

Oh, I liked how this ended :)

Initially, I was rather curious as to how you would keep this canon compliant, especially given the fact that you're a Remus/Tonks shipper yourself. So yes, the ending pleasantly surprised me. I love happy endings, but I also have a thing for sad endings, or open ones, at least.

I think one of the things I kind of forgot was how difficult a time Tonks was going through during DH. First, Remus left her, and then they used the Cruciatus Curse on her mum and then her dad had to go on the run and then he died. You reminded me of all of that through Tonks's letters, and it worked well.

Anyway, I've got to go, so sorry to cut this quite short, but I did enjoy this. I hope you don't think I was being too harsh or anything -- I think all the areas of improvement that I mentioned could easily be remedied by a bit of tweaking, so yeah. Good story, well done :)

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 03/22/12 21:03
Chapter: Tumbling Backwards

Hiya :) Sorry I've taken an age to get back to this. RL and writing my own work has kept me super-busy until now, nearly four months later, lol.

Anyway, I did enjoy this, though perhaps a little less than the previous chapter. I think part of the reason was because you had a lot of time shifts, and the transitions between past and present came across as abrupt. As in, Deanne would receive a letter, and she'd go straight to her Pensieve. I wanted to see more of her daily life, for you to develop her character more. Besides which, she didn't *have* to use her Pensieve every time she wanted to relive a memory. I think it could have worked perfectly well with her just remembering it, and it would appear more natural, too.

However, despite my qualms, I did like this. Deanne is a lovely character, and I think you did a nice job of fleshing her out and showing her feelings for Tonks increasing. I think an issue I had in the first chapter was that there weren't many scenes of their friendship developing, but in this chapter, this wasn't a problem at all, and the memories you chose were well-selected.

Onto the next chapter! Apologies again for being a bit rubbish with this, especially given your story only has one review :( It deserves more, in my opinion. I hope I haven't been too harsh.

~Soraya~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 12/26/11 12:18
Chapter: Merry-Go-Round

Hello! I must say that despite being an avid Remus/Tonks shipper, especially having written one myself, I still love it when Remus and/or Tonks are shipped with other people, too. I liked this -- Deanne is an interesting OC, and I liked the way you showed her feelings for Tonks increase during their years together in Hogwarts. I thought the mirror scene was rather powerful as well.

However, I do think that in order to make their romance a little more convincing (and it's probably rich coming from me, lol, since I had the same problem myself with a recent story of mine), I think you needed more scenes of Tonks and Deanne's friendship after their first year, It would add more weight to the story and it would also flesh out Deanne more, because so far, we don't really know much about her.

But anyway, you have an intriguing start, and I'd like to know where this goes, so I shall be keeping an eye out for updates! :)

~Soraya~



Author's Response: When you mentioned the large chunk of their friendship that I left out, I guess I meant to start at the second section. I'm going to label "First Impressions" as a prologue. I ship Tonks with Remus, too, by the way :) Thanks for the kind words!

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