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Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 08/26/14 15:35 · For: Chapter 3 ~ Decisions
I really liked this story even though it had a sad ending. I kind of hoped Draco and Hannah would continue having fun together. They were believable as lovers and I hoped that Draco would get off his high horse and marry a more common witch that he really could love.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 08/25/14 16:08 · For: Chapter 2 ~Divergence
I hope Draco doesn't just drop Hannah. She's a keeper. But couldn't going out with Hannah be the easy way out? He can keep talking himself out of going to work on the cabinet.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 08/25/14 15:13 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Choices
I might check out opaleye when I'm finished with your stories. I thought I had read a lot but I can see I still have a long way to go. I've never thought of Pansy as having a bony ass. I guess that's because she's often described as having a "piggy" face. Can't wait to see where this story goes.

Name: moniquecia (Signed) · Date: 07/23/12 4:03 · For: Chapter 3 ~ Decisions
It was fantastic! I was hooked from befinning to end. The story was interesting I like how you gave Hannah more depth and made her seem so much stronger then she seem. and I felt for Draco a little more I am really glad this was the first Fan fic I read on this site. I acctually made a account just to tell you how good I thought it was. And I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Yay - thank you very much for the glowing review. I did like writing this story and may write a short follow up because I'd love to see Draco sniping at Neville - ha ha. Hope you have a lot of fun on the site. There are some incredible writers here. ~Carole~

Name: BrokenPromise (Signed) · Date: 04/10/12 23:23 · For: Chapter 3 ~ Decisions
Well, reading that was... odd. Yet strangely satisfying. An interesting pairing...but a good ending. My favourite part was the drama in the Entrance Hall; you really see the Hufflepuff (negative?) vibes when she is being so protective of her family.

Author's Response: It was a bit of a challenge. I'd set a rarepair prompt in the Three Broomsticks and Draco/Hannah was the one couple unwritten and everyone said it wouldn;t happen ... so of course I had to try and make it happen - ha ha. I actually had plans to write a sequel for one of the GH challenges but never got around to it. Thanks for the review. I agree it was a bit odd but glad you found it satisfying. ~Carole~

Name: rose41621 (Signed) · Date: 12/02/11 2:29 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Choices
I love this story, it's my 5th time reading it and i am SO not tired of it!!!!!! Keep Writing!! :))

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked this story because I wasn't sure the pairing would appeal to anyone.There might be a spin off when I get around to it. Thanks again~Carole~

Name: notquitegranger (Signed) · Date: 11/30/11 10:41 · For: Chapter 3 ~ Decisions
Just finished another of your stories, and I can happily say I've liked every one I've read! I liked this couple, especially the way they were written, even though it wasn't going to work out in the end. Good work! :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm happy that you're happy. :) I'm rather fond of my version of Hannah in this and I'm thinking about writing a sequel with her and Neville. Thanks again ~Carole~

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 11/29/11 20:29 · For: Chapter 3 ~ Decisions
Wow Carole, that was really neat. I just love how you totally made that work, it was such fun to read. You made Hannah stronger than we get to see in the book, and gave Draco that reluctant edge that makes him so sympathetic (you love him and you know it and that's why you write him so well!) So between them, one could certainly see how they might hook up at this point in their lives - or at least in Draco's in particular, and given Hannah's break up, hers as well.

Nice smut scene, even though I was reading it in public and probably shouldn't have. ;)

And then it got so sad! Oh my! How terribly sad for Hannah to lose her mum. I'm glad you told us more about what happened. That was a biting scene, but it was brilliant. I really liked that she lashed out, because she probably needed to and I didn't want to see her reach out to Draco when her mum had just been killed by Death Eaters. Showing Draco's reaction made it even more heartbreaking, since even though they'd barely got together, it seemed like there could have been something...something that might have changed history.

The end in the bar was lovely. So bittersweet, with that perfect tie-in to canon you always have. I don't think you have to give up your card for this at all. It's yet another way you have brilliantly fleshed out a minor character and made a rarepair work.

So who are you going to pair up with Draco next? And don't say Hugo! ;)

Lovely job!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: DRUUUUUUGOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!! heh heh heh. nah, not sure there's anyone left for me to pair Draco up with. You know, I'm pretty sure that if I knew Draco in RL, I'd dislike him. I don;t mind snark, but he can be a right snivelling git as well - lol. I would probably find him amusing, though. Possibly I'd be like Hannah - not liking him but coming close to loving him.

I'm glad you liked the scene about Hannah's mum. I really hated writing that because I don't like sad scenes. I was also a bit concerned about the end bit in the bar, but I thought it was important they had some sort of closure that wasn't too bitter.

I always think hannah gets a bit of a raw deal in fanfiction (bit like Lavender) largely down to the silly things we see like her messing up her exam, but she fought at the Battle and did become the landlady of the Leaky Cauldron, so she can't have been that dim. I did give her large boobs, though - hee hee - sorry I couldn;t resist - I'm too jealous.

Thank youuuuuu ~Carole~

Name: xxbabewithbrainsxx (Signed) · Date: 11/29/11 17:35 · For: Chapter 3 ~ Decisions

Carole, that was a lovely end to teh story :)

What I liked the most was that you had that chemistry between Hannah and Draco, so much so that I'm close to becoming a Drannah shipper (that sounds like such a classy ship, lol) and yet you kept it canon. And what frustrates me a lot is when people stick the AU tag to fit a ship -- this, on the other hand, fit seamlessly into canon. I think this was my favourite line:

“I didn’t like you much at Hogwarts, Draco, even when we were together, but I think I could have loved you.

I think that really summed up their relationship and what it could have been like.

I thought you wrote Hannah really welll, particularly when she found out her mum was dead. That was a terrible moment in the sixth book and I thought you illustrated it so, so well.

Oh, and I laughed so hard at the end notes. Reading the whole of High -- done that already, hehe. And definitely agreed on Julia being a truly amazing writer. And so are you, Carole, because this story was an excellent one!


Author's Response: Thank youuuuu, so so much for reviewing. Mmm, I'm not fond of AU so if I ever write one it'll have to be for a better reason than sticking an un canon ship together. I actually like working with canon, although I have to admit this was hard given the tiny time frame Draco and Hannah had together.

I found that scene where Hannah found out about her mum very hard to write. I don;t like sad things to happen. Snark and smut I can do. Anger I can take. Sadness upsets me :(

Thank you very much again. ~Carole~

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 11/26/11 3:40 · For: Chapter 2 ~Divergence
Wow, you are really playing your cards close, aren't you? I can't tell what's going on with Draco, exactly. Sometimes he's a jerk, a selfish bastard just playing Hannah for a cheap screw. Sometimes he's obviously interested, desperate for someone more human than Pansy. It seems like he's looking for a way out, and yet he is still who he is, snarky git. And knowing how HBP turns out, it's sort of sad already...unless you've ripped, burned, and buried your canon card and they end up together. Now there is a thought... ;)
Anyway, all that ruminating is just to say that this is really good, the way you've kept it so ambiguous. Yet it's still Draco and it's still a lovely little Hannah and it's all so very in character for sixth-years and what's going on at that point in their lives with the war. Really, really original, Carole - can't wait to see how you wrap it up!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you. I am keeping this close to my chest - mwahahahahahaha. I hope they stay in character, but I'm not sure what people will think of the ending. I rather like my Hannah. I wanted her to be more than the girl who cocked up her Transfiguration OWL. Canon card? What's that then .... ~Carole~

Name: xxbabewithbrainsxx (Signed) · Date: 11/24/11 16:54 · For: Chapter 2 ~Divergence

Carole, I enjoyed this! (I always do, lol.) Seriously, you have Draco to a tee here -- he's characterised perfectly without making him smirk too much, hehe. And I think what is often your greatest strength, and certainly this is the case in this story, you can take any two random characters and write them with so much chemistry, even though they don't even know each other. And I think this shows just how much talent you have with words <3

Your version of Hannah is also really interesting, and still compliant to the fact that she is a Hufflepuff.

I'm interested to see where this goes, and how much you've stretched canon to write it...


Author's Response: Thank you. I don't think I've stretched canon too much with this. It's still compliant with the books and what we actually know of the characters. people's perceptions of the characters are, of course, a different matter. I don;t, for instance, think Hannah is always going to be the flustered girl from the exams, not if she later ends up owning and running a pub - that takes guts and strength of character.

I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I'm tweaking the end a little, but it's basically done. Thanks again - much appreciated ~Carole~

Name: xxbabewithbrainsxx (Signed) · Date: 11/23/11 7:52 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Choices

Carole, this is really interesting! I <3 rarepairs, and this one is possibly unique. You made Pansy such a b!tch in this (and it so worked -- I probably hate her as much as Malfoy does), and I also thought Draco's characterisation had just enough snark in it, but also you could see the decency in him. And I just love Hannah -- she's really self-righteous and loyal to her house.

And I love that quote by Dumbledore. It's one of my favourites. Anyway, interesting beginning, Carole, and I'd like to see where this goes. Happy birthday to Julia :)

Author's Response: Thank you, very much. I hope you like Hannah in the next chapters. She is rather self-righteous here, I can see that, although perhaps it's idealism. I love that quote =, too. Makes me tear up whenever I read it. Pansy is a right biyothc - I agree. ha ha ha. Thanks again ~Carole~

Name: SaboteurVictory (Signed) · Date: 11/23/11 1:49 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Choices
Ooooh, excellent start! Keep writing :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. The story is finished, apart from a bit of tweaking, so hopefully you'll like the rest of it. ~Carole~

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 11/22/11 17:15 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Choices
That's so cool. Sorry, that's such a dorky thing to say, but it is. You've once again made Draco Malfoy a sympathetic character and I love that. Even more, you've given Hannah Abbot a bit of a background and then have Draco crushing on her in a way that totally makes sense. I already want him to run away with her and stop being a damn Death Eater! Draco, you fool!

Pansy was scary, especially for a sixth-year. Glad Draco ditched her but I'm sure there will be hell to pay.

Nicely done - fleshed out and sympathetic and I can't wait to read the next part!

Happy birthday, Julia!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. This is the one that may get my canon card shredded - mwahahahahahaha - but uhm, well, you shall have to wait and see. I'm not sure Draco's actually crushing on her. He's 16 and wants a shag - *snigger* - but perhaps she'll get to him in other ways ...

Thank youuuuuuu ~Carole~

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 11/22/11 15:42 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Choices
Oooohh! Intriguing beginning. I want them to shag already. O.o This is one of the weirdest pairings I have ever read, but you're pulling it off so far. And I can see why it was racking in the word count: the story does need a lot of development in order to be canonically believable. Cannot wait to see where it leads.

Only complaint. You had to be pick Terry to be a prick, didn't you?

Author's Response: Shag? the lovely Hannah? Now why would she do that? Yes, canonically this took some twisting. I hope this works; it seemed to at the time, but then again I would say that - ha ha.

Yeah, sorry about Terry, but ... um ... I needed a Claw. Anthony and Michael didn't quite fit for me. Um, you might not want to read the rest ... *hides*

Thanks for the review, my love. ~Croll~

Name: the opaleye (Signed) · Date: 11/22/11 11:57 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Choices
Oh My Salazar, Croll. First of all, thank you for writing me a Draco fic! I know he's a git but I love reading Draco fanfic xD And a Draco rarepair no less?!?! FLAILS. Seriously, this is amazing and I'm completely intrigued as to where you're going to take this. Draco's characterisation is great and Hannah is shaping up to be interesting, as well. I looooved the way you quoted Dumbledore at the end. It was quite chilling, especially thinking about it in retrospect after what we now know about Draco and the choices he had to make...

The way Hannah got under Draco's skins was so well done. You made Pansy perfectly irritating (more than irritating, actually. UGH.) and this particular bit really stood out to me.

“You can’t get enough of it, Draco,” she whispered, her eyes alight with malice and lust. His insides curdled, but she was right. He needed this because it was a respite from failure.

Abbott had been crying, he thought.

Gahhh I'm so excited to read more of this! Another chaptered Croll fic to follow!!!!!!

Anyway, thank you so much for writing this. Seriously, this is an amazing birthday present. I'm still flailing.

Julia xoxo

Author's Response: It is all written, so the next chapter should be up soon. It probably works better as a one shot but it was over 10k, - quelle shock! I'm glad you like Draco in this because much as I think he's a snivelling git I also like the possibilities .of his snarkiness - especially to Pansy. Thank you for reviewing and I hope you like the rest of it. ~Croll~

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