This is a sweet story. I'm unfamiliar with the song, but the lyrics at the beginning beautifully segued into the story and I found myself reading them again once I'd finished the story.
First person is a difficult perspective to get right, but I think you've done a great job with Hermione here. She is a character who rather lends herself to the self-analysis and introspection that first person can bring, but through her eyes you also captured Ron rather well.
I noticed a few minor errors
They had invited me but I told them that I couldn’t get work off--which was true. - I think you mean 'couldn;t get time off work' or something similar.
In another place, you've misspelled 'Apparate' - typing 'Apperate'
I did pause a little at Ron saying he'd always liked Hermione since that first day on the train because I tend to think he disliked her rather a lot until the incident with the troll. In fact, their relationship is punctuated with bouts of them absolutely loathing each other. Whilst I agree that their rows could be a cover for true feelings, perhaps a line from Hermione laughingly telling him that they didn't get on for ages, wouldn;t have gone amiss.
I love the last paragraph. I adore the sentiments about marriage and happy ever afters.
~Carole~
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Carole! I'm sure that there are a few more errors then the ones that you pointed out. If I ever get the time to go back and fix it, I'll do it. As for the Ron thing, I like to secretly believe that he liked her a litle bit from the start like James and Lily. But that's just me. :) Thank you for such a nice review! Cheers! ~MJ
Hey MJ!
It's been really long since I've read one of your stories; plus I wanted to get a bit of background for your banner (which I'm currently working on) so I was like, 'why not?'
I must say, your writing is as awesome as it always was. I love your Ronmione stories, especially as I love them too. I stopped writing about them a while ago but they'll never ever stop being my OTP. I love your take on this couple.
This story is amazing. It was so in-character of Ron to freak out at the first thought of marriage and cause a break-up, then come up with the idea himself, because he's so scared of losing Hermione again. :p And Hermione was spot-on with her tears during the proposal. LOL. The only weird part was the mention of God. Though I'm sure they must believe in God (they do celebrate Christmas and Easter and all) them attributing it all to God sounded a little... OOC. Just my thought, though. Sorry about that.
Overall, the story was very cute and a nice, short, satisfying read which left me grinning. I'll get your banner to you soon!
Pooja x
Author's Response: Aw! Thanks for such a wonderful review! I haven't really written anything for awhile but one night I got an itch to write and this is what happened. I do agree with you on the OOC part. But this is my justification for it: Since Hermione comes from a Muggle family that lives in England, I'm assuming she grew up in a religious home. So I thought that it was only fair from her Muggle upbringing that she would somehow incorporate God into her marriage. Does that make sense? I hope it does. Thank you for the review again! They are always great. :) ~MJ
I personally love that song and you fit it so well with hermione and ron. Good work.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad that you liked it. Thank you for the review!! :) ~MJ
This was a very sweet interpretation of Ron and Hermione's engagement : ) The only thing that was weird was the mention of God throughout the story. They never really talked about God in the Wizarding World. Nice job though!
Author's Response: Thanks! I do realize that. However, I felt like it was just a good touch for the story. If that makes any sense. . . :) Thank you for the review! ~MJ
this is really sweet.. a short sweet and lovely story :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad that you like it! I was having a major writer's block and this is what came out. Thank you for reviewing! ~MJ
