Reviews For Disillusioned
Reviewer: lovethelife92
Date: 12/03/11 17:43
Chapter: ...In the Library

Great story and I loved the ending! :)

Reviewer: Phoenix13
Date: 11/23/11 4:57
Chapter: ...In the Library

This was very good! Two things:
1) Why is it not longer??? ;)
2) Wouldn't they learn the Disillusionment Charm in Charms class, not Transfiguration? (Just a little nitpick.)

Author's Response: Thank you! I did think about that, by the way. My conclusion was that the Disillusionment Charm is something that you can put on yourself, like self-transfiguration, and that James was described as top in transfiguration which would greatly annoy Lily. She would want to work extra hard to beat him, and thus practice outside of class. Thanks, though :)

Reviewer: I hate Tuney
Date: 11/21/11 22:23
Chapter: ...In the Library

oohhh I loved it :D Write another one ;)

Reviewer: iLuna17
Date: 11/21/11 0:19
Chapter: ...In the Library

I really liked this. It shows a unique way of changing Lily's view on James, though I do have to say her changing her mind quickly is on the verge of cliché. But you used it in a unique way, so that was really good.

On the invisible aspect: I thought that was brilliant. How Lily loved the idea of invisibility, because then she was finally alone.

Her realization at the end was also amazing. How she saw that James was going to fight Voldemort, and how she envied his eyes.

On the cliché note again: I like how at the end she isn't snogging James's face off. I like how it's just the beginning, and how she isn't all "OMG! I love him!"

All in all I really loved this. You should write another like it. :)

Ellie

Author's Response: Thank you for the honest review!

Reviewer: Siriusblack_tonks
Date: 11/20/11 14:16
Chapter: ...In the Library

This is good, you should make it 2 parts and show Lily and James getting together. But it is very well written, good job!

Reviewer: Siriusblack_tonks
Date: 11/20/11 14:16
Chapter: ...In the Library

This is good, you should make it 2 parts and show Lily and James getting together. But it is very well written, good job!

Reviewer: A Magical Muggle
Date: 11/20/11 2:03
Chapter: ...In the Library

This brought a smile to my face. It's such a sweet story and I love your writing style.

Reviewer: Shreeja
Date: 11/19/11 19:44
Chapter: ...In the Library

This was an absolutely lovely way of determining why Lily softened toward James. And your characters were in character, so good job there. :) I had fun reading this (though I wonder if there'd be a sequel to this, one fine day, after James and Lily were together, when Lily tells him about this perhaps?). I like the flow of your writing. Good job!

Reviewer: StarsApartlover
Date: 11/19/11 17:07
Chapter: ...In the Library

Oh please make a long fix! I hate one fic's because they are always sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooogood!

You must login (register) to review.
Information
Find out everything you need to know about the site right here.


We have stories and authors in this archive.

:

RSS
Choose Theme:
SOCIAL MEDIA
     
MOST RECENT
Chocolate Frog by L A Moody 3rd-5th Years
Amid the desolation of Diagon Alley, a tiny ray of hope lay buried. Nothing...
I Suspect Nargles by foolondahill17 3rd-5th Years
“No one’s ever kissed me before…. What is one to do now?” An extensive...
The Life and Times of Linnea Potter by Cantatrix 1st-2nd Years
Linnea Potter has lived under the tyranny of her relatives for the better part...
FEATURED
Glass over the Flame by the opaleye 3rd-5th Years
Harry, Hermione, and the moments in between. He doesn’t say that this...
Tom Riddle and the Chamber of Secrets by CanisMajor 3rd-5th Years
What really happened the last time someone let the Basilisk out? Harry Potter...
Red Squirrel/Sun Rises by hestiajones 1st-2nd Years
+ He wouldn't celebrate his birthday, but his son had other ideas. + This was...
Sybill Trelawney and the Unexpected Gift by Squibstress 3rd-5th Years
Sybill Trelawney learns to live with her Inner Eye, cooking sherry, and Minerva...
Pat-a-Cake by foolondahill17 1st-2nd Years
Molly Weasley II, called Pat, and twenty-one lot and little-known facts. Or...
Wood by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor 6th-7th Years
Marcus Flint, the infamous Super Seventh Captain of the Slytherin Quidditch...
CATEGORIES