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Name: lovesmyreligion (Signed) · Date: 03/10/12 2:21 · For: Chapter 2-A Late Start to the Day
Oh my gosh! I love this! I'm usually a Ron/Hermione person but I love Harry/Ginny. And the little bits of Romione are enough to suit my fancy.(: This is too cute and I can not wait for you to update!

Name: TheInvisibilityCloakOwner (Signed) · Date: 02/21/12 14:16 · For: Chapter 2-A Late Start to the Day
This Is By Far One Of The Best Harry-Ginny Fics I've Read...!
Your Charachter Touches Are Superb.. Especially For Ginny.
Only Harry,According To The Books Was Not So Open , He Was More Of I Guess The 'Suffer In Silence' Type? Like The Inrovert Guys?
But Yet I'm Really Really Lovin It~!
Please , Please, Please Write Fast!!
*Sits Down On A Knee And Begs*

Name: InvestedWithNargles (Signed) · Date: 12/20/11 0:24 · For: Chapter 2-A Late Start to the Day
I LOVED this!!!!! Write more!!!! Finish it!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: I'm trying to! I promise! I will not just give up on this story, I assure you ;) Thank you for the review! -Megan Xxx

Name: katte (Signed) · Date: 12/08/11 1:42 · For: Chapter 2-A Late Start to the Day
Thanks for updating, I really liked, please keep it up !! :)

Author's Response: I'll try! Thank you for the review:) Love Megan xxx

Name: katte (Signed) · Date: 11/17/11 1:50 · For: Chapter 1- A Butterbeer Between Friends
I really liked, please update soon, I really enjoyed Harry and Ginnys conversation and interaction.

Author's Response: I'm trying to write it as quick as I can as well as my humongous homework load! It shouldn't be too long a wait...I hope :) I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. Thank you for the review! Love Megan x

Name: Evora (Signed) · Date: 11/09/11 23:20 · For: Chapter 1- A Butterbeer Between Friends
Firstly, I’d like to congratulate you on writing an AU fic. I don’t have the brain power and the determination to write an AU fic, so I’m quite jealous/happy for authors that do.

This is actually one of the few times I’ve read canon ships, Harry and Ginny most especially, so it was nice to read on the familiarity of their dynamics. Your first scene was ace. I loved how Ron and Hermione acted awkward, despite enjoying what they were doing, but I found it a bit weird how Hermione didn’t have anything to say at all… in the whole chapter. I think that if Hermione was to be teased, she’d be indignant and spluttering quietly, not just sitting there and saying nothing. Ron was adorable though. You got him pretty good with how he spoke to his friends and family. He was funny, especially on the part where he’d justify himself to the twins, but end up humiliatingly defeated.

Harry was great. The way you wrote him in the first scenes was resigned, quiet, shy but outspoken. But as the story went, I felt like he was becoming less in character. He had this confidence which I can understand came from finally defeating Voldemort, but he grew a bit distant as the story goes. I think it’s because there wasn’t much of his thoughts in the story. The details were more into literally saying what was happening instead of describing it, and I think that’s the area you should improve more in. I actually got that from another beta who commented the same thing to my story, and I thought it was important for you to know that there’s more you can do to make it better. Not that I’m saying you’re no good, because you are a pretty good writer. There are just things to improve on and I hope you don’t take it personally. :-)

I liked how you portrayed Ginny as this energetic, friendly girl who seemed like she knew there was more to what she was doing than what others thought. Or maybe that’s just me, since that was what I suspected in how she acted with Harry. They’re downright bosom buddies, aren’t they? And I think you wrote their relationship very well. They’re very friendly, almost borderline flirty, but that’s because they were teasing Ron. Ha, that was funny, that part. What I found a bit weird though was the fact that you didn’t explain how Harry and Ginny ended up living together. I mean, that’s definitely suspicious. They have a history, and it just seemed unlikely. . . unless, of course, you can explain that in the later chapters. :D

Molly was fantastic. She was still the doting, loving mother, and I loved it. I actually missed her as I read the story. I also missed Fred. Insert sigh here. I’m doing cruel things to myself, reading AU fics. One other thing: maybe try to be a bit more British? There were many Americanisms here like saying “yep” and “jeez.”

On the whole, you’ve got a promising story, but there’s still the plot left to be seen. Much like a thesis statement, I’m still waiting on it. Am I right to assume that this first chapter was more like an introduction? And that the twist will come very soon? I hope so! I enjoyed reading this, and I really hope you continue writing till everyone can read the end of it! Good luck! :-)

Author's Response: Thank you soo much for the lovely review! Thanks for the advice, I will try and focus on describing things more. It's just in school my teachers tell me off for describing things in too much detail, I'm yet to find a happy medium! It's funny that you mentioned the exessive american terms because I'm actually from England, I guess I've just been reading too many American fanfics recently :) Love Megan x

Name: LillyLuna (Signed) · Date: 11/03/11 23:31 · For: Chapter 1- A Butterbeer Between Friends
So far this is an AWESOME story, please write more :)

Author's Response: I'm writing it now :) Thank you for the review. Love Megan x

Name: BookWorm530 (Signed) · Date: 11/01/11 2:26 · For: Chapter 1- A Butterbeer Between Friends
This is a cute story but Ginny and Harry's characters are completely wrong. I could never see them act like that and some of their conversations just don't feel real. I think your best portrayal of HP characters was Fred and George. The others are just not genuine or believable. Otherwise it is a good start to an interesting plot, as long as the characters are fleshed out more. Good luck!

Author's Response: Sorry about the characters! However, this is only my first fanfiction, so I'm still finding my feet and getting used to things. But in my opinion the characters would have changed - especially Harry and Ginny and their relationship - because they have been out of school for a while and have become slightly different people. Harry and Ginny's relationship is different because they are more comfortable around each other now - they HAVE been living together for a year - so they're closer than when they were at Hogwarts. I hope things will start to become more believable. It is only the first chapter, and that first main conversation had to happen in any case, it was crucial. If it didn't match up to what you hoped, I'm sorry. I really am working on it! Thank you for the review though, I'll make sure to watch my characterisation in the future! Love Megan x

Name: Weekendallstars (Signed) · Date: 10/30/11 4:12 · For: Chapter 1- A Butterbeer Between Friends
Soooooo awsome loved it next one asap!!!! :)

Author's Response: Thank you sooo much for the review :) I'm trying really hard to write fanfiction as well as juggling mountainous amounts of coursework! It shouldn't be too long a wait though. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Love Megan x

Name: Amelia_Bones (Signed) · Date: 10/29/11 17:40 · For: Chapter 1- A Butterbeer Between Friends
It's a promising start. My main issue is, at this point in time, why you didn't stick to canon. We know what they do after the war and that Fred is gone. AND, that Harry and Ginny are together. But, perhaps you've got something cooking down that road and it is your vision.

Author's Response: Yeah, I kinda needed the previous Harry/Ginny not to have happened to actually have a storyline...so that was necessary. And as for the Fred point, I hated the idea of George without his twin! I cried whilst reading that he'd died in Deathly Hallows. So I guess I just wanted to bring him back for the purpose of my story, and I want the twins to make mischief in future chapters! So please stick with it! Bear in mind that this is only the 1st chapter! Thanks for the review though! It was much appreciated :)Love Megan x

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