Reviewer: Lillina_Potter
Date: 12/20/11 5:53
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Fish and the Pelican

I loved it(: this is an amazing story. I love at the end, he and Luna are still good friends (:

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 10/06/11 6:59
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Fish and the Pelican

This was a very sweet story and I think you did a great job with both their characters. I was amongst those who, initally when DH (the book) was released, thought Neville and Luna would work together, but on further reflection and JK Rowling's statement that Neville marries Hannah, realised that Neville and Luna really aren't suited.

Yet, he knew they would not last outside of this room. If they tried to continue out there, he would either suffocate Luna’s glorious spirit with his need to be reassured that she would stay, or she would madden him with her total lack of structure in living her life. - That's justa perfect explanation of why Neville and Luna don't work together, I don't think I could have put it better.

And yet I also thought it believable that Neville wanted to hold on to Luna, because considering what they'd both just been through, she was someone familiar who he knows understands what he's experienced.

I think you did a great job with Luna, and she's a difficult character to get right. I thought it was so her the way she kept commenting on the sunrise, and the tale was something I could imagine her telling and really worked for this story. It was a little ambiguous, and I also liked that it confused Neville, because I think a lot about Luna confuses him.

I have to admit, for a while I was worried that in the "Fours Years Later" part, they were going to get together again, but what actually happened was great. I like that Luna knows Neville well enough not to just set him up with everyone (as Ginny is trying to, by the sounds of it) and actually picks someone with whom he'll be happy.

Anyway, in general I thought it was a very sweet story and well-written.

~Katrina

Author's Response: Thanks. I t was Neville and Luna on the train during OOTP that brought me into the books my son was being read. I went to 4 high schools and I was a Neville-like character and the only friends I made in my last high school were Luna types. So I used that in my first story, 'Luna Lovegood and the Charmed Circle', I had Ginny trying to hook up Luna and Neville. However, Luna demures claiming that if Neville had a girl friend at that time he would spend all of his time trying to be what the girl friend wanted Neville to be and not what he could become. Neville needed to mature to be able to recognize his own worth and accept the love given. I felt Luna and her deep friendship would be the one to let him see and guide him. Thank you for you comments

Reviewer: JV Heights
Date: 10/05/11 2:18
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Fish and the Pelican

Really, really great!

Reviewer: Rosi Zeller
Date: 10/04/11 19:55
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Fish and the Pelican

The fable about the fish and the pelican was very beautiful and fitting! It's a wonderful story, well done!

Reviewer: bearfoot
Date: 10/03/11 17:59
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Fish and the Pelican

Wonderful. The ending brought tears to my eyes.

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