Reviewer: harry4lif
Date: 07/23/12 5:10
Chapter: And I've Got No Illusions About You

Hey there!

This is kind of a review for all of the chapters so far, because I just couldn’t stop reading once I started long enough to give a good review.

I must admit, the first thing that drew me into this story is the fact that it’s what might have happened if Voldemort never existed. I always wondered what might have happened, but I don’t think I have really ever stumbled upon a story that really takes that idea and explores it. I must say though, you did fantastic with this story.

I love that you don’t have Lily and Potter together in the beginning of the story, and that he isn’t the Head Boy. While we know he was indeed it in the Potterverse, it’s good to see a story where he isn’t all that he thinks he is. Don’t get me wrong, I adore the couple and think they’re wonderful together, but it is nice to read a new and refreshing point of view on something that happened.

I must also say that you really captivated me in this story. From the moment I started reading it, I couldn’t stop. I had to know what was coming next in the chapters. The story just sucked me in and didn’t let me go until I had no more chapters to read. You must write more soon, so I can keep reading the story.

You did a very good job with your oc Vanessa in this story. At first I had my doubts about her. I mean, pretty, charming, able to get Potter’s attention? I had to admit I was a bit worried. But those traits that you originally show us just worked into an overall bigger picture where those things aren’t really faulted against her in my opinion. She is a sound OC in my opinion, which I must just say great job on. She is one of the reasons I enjoy this story so much.

Overall, I just wanted to applaud you on the plot. It can be hard to write something that is from the AU world, and it’s most definitely hard to write something this good in that difficult setting. Also for keeping the characters in line! We don’t know a whole lot about this era, but I think you did a great job portraying the characters how they should be.

Now that I got all of that out of the way….write more soon! Please! I need to know what happens as this plot just continues to thicken. You have me hooked into this story, and I really need to know what happens next. I hope you update soon!

I hope to see more of this wonderful story, and I will definitely continue to read this until the end.


Author's Response: Thanks for the long review! I am glad that you like the story so far. I spent a lot of time thinking about what would have happened in a world without Voldemort, and so am glad to hear that it seems realistic enough. I was worried that some of the choices I made (particularly pertaining to my characterization of James and Lily) would put off readers. And I am really happy that you like Vanessa. She is my favorite person to write in this story. She ended up sticking around for a bit longer than I had originally planned because I liked her so much.

Reviewer: kobbiblue
Date: 07/17/12 6:41
Chapter: You Can't Hide Behind Social Graces

Great chapter!!!! This is becoming one of my favourite fanfics. Can't wait for the new chapter!

Reviewer: MoRoCcAnAnDpRoUd
Date: 07/17/12 4:26
Chapter: And I've Got No Illusions About You

Great chapter! I love your writing :)

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it.

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/17/12 0:14
Chapter: And I've Got No Illusions About You

Ooo very good chapter :-) I cannot wait to see Lily's reaction to this revelation!!

Author's Response: Glad you liked the chapter! The next one is in the queue.

Reviewer: jamlil
Date: 06/30/12 7:54
Chapter: And When I Look Up, I Just Trip Over Things

it's great.hope to see what's next :D

Author's Response: The next update is in the queue, so should hopefully be up soon!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 06/23/12 22:44
Chapter: And When I Look Up, I Just Trip Over Things

Great chapter,,,Cannot wait to get the next update and see what happens :-)

Author's Response: Thanks! Next update is in the queue.

Reviewer: dragongurl
Date: 06/21/12 22:36
Chapter: And When I Look Up, I Just Trip Over Things

Each chapter just leaves me anxious for more!!! Everything looks so bad right now, for everyone! Anxiously awaiting the next chapter!!! And thanks for the quick update!

Author's Response: Yes, everything looks pretty bad at the moment, but some things might get a little better in the next few chapters. Of course, some things might also keep getting worse...

Reviewer: dragongurl
Date: 06/12/12 0:08
Chapter: I Miss All The Good Stuff

Oh no!!! This is not looking good! Urgh, Peter! He's definitely between a rock and a hard place right now, but this is really bad!!! What's gonna happen?!?! Thanks for another fantastic chappie!!!

Author's Response: No, things are not looking good. And they're going to continue not looking good in this next chapter, too...

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 06/11/12 16:35
Chapter: I Miss All The Good Stuff

Poor Lily, I cannot wait to see how this turns out! I hope you can update soon :-)

Author's Response: Thanks! Unfortunately, this next chapter is also going to be hard for Lily...

Reviewer: dragongurl
Date: 06/01/12 1:25
Chapter: Cause When I Look Down

Poor Peter!! And poor Remus! Nothing seems to be going right for the Marauders right now. Except for James and Lily's friendship, that is! Thanks so much for another wonderful chapter!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, you should feel sorry for Peter. But he's about to make a bad decision, and that decision is going to cause a lot of problems for James and Lily...

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 06/01/12 0:47
Chapter: Cause When I Look Down

Ughh, Nasty little rat! Of course there wouldn'tbe much of a story if there wasn't conflict...Great chapter

Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, Peter is about to cause a lot of damage...

Reviewer: Hermione Jean Weasley
Date: 05/31/12 19:02
Chapter: Cause When I Look Down

I loved this chapter! And I'm so excited to see what happens next especially what Peter will tell Avery!

Author's Response: Thanks! The next chapter will give a pretty good idea of what Peter told Avery and just how much damage it is going to cause.

Reviewer: Skarlett
Date: 05/22/12 0:42
Chapter: You Actually Believe That They Are Real

Well, I honestly wasn't extremely impressed when I began reading the story... I was a little dissappointed in the way you portrayed James in the beginning.

However, something made me want to continue reading...

And after reading this chapter, I decided that I immediately wanted to review. I've read various James/Lily fics, in which Lily finds out our werewolf friend's secret. Most of them featured Lily immediately accepting Remus's problem, or feeling sorry for him. However, I really liked the way you have written her reaction. It seems much more realistic in my opinion. Another thing I loved was James's response to Lily's anger.

"And I promise you, Evans, if you breathe a word of his secret to anyone, I will make you regret it."

I think that this perfectly showed the loyalty and friendship of the Marauders. It's a very interesting twist, actually. I don't think I've read a fanfiction yet in which James actually threatens his dearest Lily. ;) I must say that I thought you wrote his character very well by doing so.

Being a die-hard Remus fan, it's amazing how much I loved Lily's reaction. :)

Great chapter, I'll definitely continue reading!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you gave the story a chance even after not liking my portrayal of James in the beginning. And I'm really glad you liked this chapter. It was hard to write and (since most of the stories I've read show Lily immediately being okay with the Marauders putting people in danger) I was concerned people wouldn't like her reaction.

Reviewer: jamlil
Date: 05/21/12 18:43
Chapter: And I Try to Laugh At Whatever Life Brings

it was great and sad.well kind of.update soon.

Author's Response: Thanks! Next chapter is in the queue.

Reviewer: dragongurl
Date: 05/18/12 3:45
Chapter: And I Try to Laugh At Whatever Life Brings

Oh no! What is Sirius going to do now???
Thanks again for such a great story and for the quick updates!

Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, Sirius is going to have to figure something out, and soon...

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 05/17/12 23:11
Chapter: And I Try to Laugh At Whatever Life Brings

I love how long these chapters are! Excellent and quick update :-) Thank you

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you're liking the chapters.

Reviewer: dragongurl
Date: 05/15/12 3:56
Chapter: I Think This Is Good Enough

I love how well written the characters are and how every chapter leaves me eager for more and never bored. Keep up the great work and I'm eagerly anticipating the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks! So glad you're liking it so far. Next chapter is in the queue.

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 05/14/12 22:09
Chapter: I Think This Is Good Enough

Ahhh I loved Lily drunk! Very entertaining ;-)

Author's Response: Thanks! Drunk Lily was fun to write. :)

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 05/11/12 20:40
Chapter: Cause When I Look Around

Wow, What a surprise there! I cannot wait to see how Lily's potion comes along even with Mr. Potter's help!

Reviewer: Opessda64224
Date: 05/10/12 12:07
Chapter: But I've Got No Problem With That, Really

this is totally awesome :D

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