Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/11/12 0:03
Chapter: Cause When I Look Down

It looks like Peter is going to be a rat.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/10/12 22:48
Chapter: That Your Friends Would Forgive You

"Designed to ensure that those who work in the Ministry and serve the interests of the public do everything they can to further the ideals of our society and protect our heritage so that magical cultural can be passed along to our children."--clever wording of course threatening to burn down business doesn' exactly protect magicul culture does it?

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/10/12 22:32
Chapter: I Think You'd Find

In Harry Potter, Peter betrayed his friends because he was unwilling to sacrifice himself. Here he is betraying because his family is threatened, similar to what Luna's father did.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/10/12 22:22
Chapter: You Would Be In Some Good Company

Poor Peter, ever the weak one. One wonders why he didn't mention to anyone that he was being threatened.

I like the interaction of James and Vanessa. Were it not that you had put so many hint as to how James and Lily feel about each other, I could completely satisfied with this relationship.

Caradoc and Lily don't seem to have the honesty needed to be a couple. Right now Lily is holding back because she wants James to live up to her better expectations, (but she won't admit it)

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/10/12 11:38
Chapter: Just Give Up and Admit You're An Asshole

This was an excellant chapter. It tied up all the details from previous chapters in a coherant way.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/10/12 11:25
Chapter: You Actually Believe That They Are Real

Good chapter!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/10/12 11:14
Chapter: Is That While You're Telling Me Stories

I was surprized that Lily acted this way after figuring out what was going on.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/09/12 22:42
Chapter: Is You Don't Know How You Feel

I found it surprising that Vanessa enjoyed the date.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/09/12 22:27
Chapter: What Bothers Me

I like Vanessa's character.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/09/12 22:08
Chapter: Is That You Believe What You're Saying

When I was reading this a second time, I wondered if Lanwick had an encounter with a werewolf that would explain her feelings.
I am curious if there might be a more rational explanation as to why Lanwick thinks Muggleborns don't get wizarding society other than just prejudice.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/07/12 15:49
Chapter: What Bugs Me

Good chapter. You use the characters to explain points of view and still be people.

Author's Response: Thanks for all the reviews! I hope you're enjoying the story so far.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/07/12 15:35
Chapter: But I've Got No Problem With That, Really

I like the direction this story is taking. You are taking the time to develop your characters.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 09/02/12 20:07
Chapter: You Can't Hide Behind Social Graces

Had I known of the premise of this story, I would have started reading this story earlier. As it was, I saw you had 24 chapters done, so I thought I would give it a shot.

Reviewer: jamlil
Date: 09/02/12 19:16
Chapter: And Guess What? I Never Did

that was great.waiting for the next :)

Author's Response: Thanks! The next chapter is in the queue.

Reviewer: jamlil
Date: 09/02/12 10:18
Chapter: You Can't Hide Behind Social Graces

it was great. specially the last part. update soon

Reviewer: dragongurl
Date: 09/01/12 3:22
Chapter: And Guess What? I Never Did

Yay, you're back!!! I was getting a little worried, but I'm happy to see that you haven't abandoned this story. :) And... SHE'S GONE!!! Sorry, I know you liked her, but now we can really get some Lily/James action. :) Thanks for another wonderful chapter!!

Author's Response: Sorry, I was out of the country for 5 weeks, and had very limited access to Internet. But I'm back home now, so you can expect more frequent updates until the end of the story.

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 08/31/12 17:43
Chapter: And Guess What? I Never Did

Yay for the update!! Fantastic chapter! Cannot wait for the next update :-)

Author's Response: Thanks! The next chapter is in the queue...

Reviewer: jamlil
Date: 08/27/12 19:36
Chapter: And I've Got No Illusions About You

hey there
what's happening. you haven't updated for a long time!!

Reviewer: GhostPhoenix6287
Date: 08/11/12 4:54
Chapter: You Can't Hide Behind Social Graces

This is like my favorite story on here. I check everyday to see if you put a new chapter up!!! Cant wait till the next chapter!!!!!

Reviewer: dragongurl
Date: 08/08/12 18:43
Chapter: And I've Got No Illusions About You

I just realized that I hadn't reviewed this chapter yet! Sorry! Anywho... this chapter was sooo great! I don't want Lily to be hurt by Vanessa, but I can't wait for her to out of the way so James and Lily can get together! I love the way you have written her character but I really love James and Lily together. :) And Belby! As soon as I began reading the scene I knew that James had brought the only person who could help Lily and I got so excited!! You are one of my all time favorite authors and I adore this story. Keep up the great work and I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I wouldn't worry too much about Vanessa, she won't be in the way that much longer...

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